Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและถูกต้องทางไวยากรณ์มากขึ้น รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน เช่น การอธิบายกิจกรรมที่ทำในวันเกิดอย่างเป็นธรรมชาติและมีความหมาย

例: On my birthday, I usually pray to Allah to express my gratitude for my health and for successfully completing university. After that, I spend time with my family to celebrate together.

提案: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้สมบูรณ์และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น การใช้ 'and' หรือ 'then' รวมถึงการใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำ

例: When I was a kid, I usually stayed with my family and we had dinner together. We also exchanged gifts and celebrated happily.

提案: ควรตอบคำถามอย่างชัดเจนและใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ รวมถึงอธิบายเหตุผลหรือเงื่อนไขอย่างชัดเจนโดยใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น 'if' และ 'because' เพื่อให้คำตอบมีความสมเหตุสมผลและเข้าใจง่าย

例: I think celebrating my birthday is important if I am free from work because it allows me to relax and enjoy time with my loved ones.

提案: ควรตอบคำถามโดยตรงและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดอย่างมีเหตุผล

例: I don't know much about important birthdays in China, but in Thailand, Mother's Day and Father's Day are very important celebrations.

× On my birthday I usually pray to to Allah to say appreciate it and grateful and blessing to Allah for I I survived and university.

✓ On my birthday, I usually pray to Allah to express my appreciation and gratitude and ask for blessings because I survived university.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'say appreciate it and grateful and blessing' which is not proper verb + -ing form usage. The verbs 'appreciate' and 'grateful' need to be expressed as 'express my appreciation and gratitude' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× When I was a kid, I usually stay with my family and dinner together to share, to share the gift or to celebrate together.

✓ When I was a kid, I usually stayed with my family and had dinner together, shared gifts, or celebrated together.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Stay' should be in past tense 'stayed' to match 'was'. Also, 'dinner together to share' is awkward; it should be 'had dinner together'. The phrase 'to share the gift' should be 'shared gifts' to fit the past tense narrative.

× Depending on the situation, if I free from work and every. Participate my celebration birthday is can be.

✓ Depending on the situation, if I am free from work, I can participate in my birthday celebration.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper sentence structure. 'If I free from work' lacks the verb 'am'. 'Every.' is incomplete. 'Participate my celebration birthday is can be' is ungrammatical and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.

× I rarely known about people in China, which is most important to celebrate, but in Thailand? On Mother's Day and Father's Day is important to celeb celebrate.

✓ I rarely know about people in China whose birthdays are most important to celebrate, but in Thailand, Mother's Day and Father's Day are important to celebrate.

'I rarely known' is incorrect; it should be 'I rarely know'. 'Which is most important' should be 'whose birthdays are most important' to correctly refer to people. 'Is important to celeb celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'are important to celebrate' to agree with plural subjects and correct verb form.