Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваші відповіді є досить природними, але зверніть увагу на повторення слів і граматичні помилки, наприклад, подвійне "I". Також використовуйте зв'язки для кращої логіки, наприклад, "and then" або "after that". Намагайтеся уникати надмірної довжини речень.

例: On my birthday, I usually receive many presents and warm congratulations from my family and relatives. Then, in the evening, I invite my friends to my house, and we celebrate together with cake and delicious food, which makes my day very special and enjoyable.

提案: Зверніть увагу на граматичні помилки, наприклад, "when I was child" слід сказати "when I was a child". Також уникайте неправильного використання слів, наприклад, "gay games" не підходить, краще сказати "fun games". Використовуйте зв'язки для кращої структури.

例: When I was a child, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family and friends. We would have a small party at home with fun games and presents, which made my day very special and memorable.

提案: Ваша відповідь має граматичні помилки і не зовсім зрозуміла. Спробуйте будувати речення чіткіше, використовуючи зв'язки, наприклад, "Firstly" і "Secondly". Також уникайте неправильних форм слів, наприклад, "you are enjoyable" слід замінити на "you enjoy yourself".

例: Yes, in my opinion, it is essential to celebrate birthdays. Firstly, because you become a year older, and secondly, because you enjoy yourself and feel happy.

提案: Ваша відповідь містить граматичні помилки і неточності. Слово "imperator" не є доречним, краще сказати "emperor". Також речення слід будувати чіткіше, наприклад, "I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of the emperor or the president."

例: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of the emperor or the president.

× In the evening, I I invite my friends to my house and we celebrate together with cake and delicious food, which make my day very special and enjoyable.

✓ In the evening, I invite my friends to my house and we celebrate together with cake and delicious food, which makes my day very special and enjoyable.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'which' referring to 'cake and delicious food' as a singular idea. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typographical error and should be removed.

× When I was child, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family and friends.

✓ When I was a child, I usually celebrated my birthday with my family and friends.

The noun 'child' is countable and requires an article 'a' before it in this context to be grammatically correct.

× We would have a small party at home with gay games and presents, which made my day very special and memorable.

✓ We would have a small party at home with fun games and presents, which made my day very special and memorable.

The adjective 'gay' is outdated and inappropriate in this context; 'fun' is a more suitable adjective to describe games that are enjoyable.

× Yes, in my opinion is essential to do birthday parties because to begin with you become a year older and for second you are enjoyable and you are pleased to.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, it is essential to have birthday parties because, to begin with, you become a year older, and secondly, you enjoy yourself and feel pleased.

The sentence lacks the subject 'it' before 'is essential'. The phrase 'to do birthday parties' is awkward; 'to have birthday parties' is better. 'For second' should be 'secondly'. 'You are enjoyable' is incorrect; it should be 'you enjoy yourself'. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× I think the most important birthday to celebrate is China is to their imperator or their president.

✓ I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of their emperor or their president.

The sentence has a structural error with repeated 'is' and missing preposition 'in' before 'China'. 'Imperator' is incorrect; the correct term is 'emperor'. The phrase 'to their imperator or their president' is awkward; 'that of their emperor or their president' is clearer and grammatically correct.