Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“birth party”应为“birthday party”，“catch a cake”应为“cut a cake”。建议注意基本语法和常用搭配，避免表达不自然。

例: On my birthday, I usually organize a birthday party and invite my close friends and parents. We have dinner together and cut a cake. It is always a memorable and unforgettable experience.

提案: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，如“when was a child”应为“when I was a child”，“it's very astonishing me”表达不自然。建议加强时态和句子结构的练习，表达更准确。

例: When I was a child, I always cried on my birthday because my parents gave me surprises. Every year, they gave me many gifts such as a remote control helicopter and cars. At that time, I was very amazed.

提案: 回答内容混乱且语法错误严重，表达不清晰。建议先理清思路，使用简单句表达观点，避免拼写和语法错误。

例: When I was a child, I thought celebrating birthdays was important. But now, I prefer to celebrate alone and just eat a small cake because parties take too much time and money.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，如“Guo Qingji”应为“National Day”，“great celebrity”用词不当。建议学习相关文化词汇并注意句子结构。

例: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the National Day of the People's Republic of China. It is called "Guo Qing Jie" and includes over seven days off. It is a very important and grand celebration.

× I usually organize a birth party and invite my close friends, my parents to join it.

✓ I usually organize a birthday party and invite my close friends and my parents to join it.

这里“birth party”应为“birthday party”，且“my close friends, my parents”之间缺少连词“and”，导致表达不完整。

× We have a dinner together and catch a cake.

✓ We have dinner together and cut a cake.

“catch a cake”用词错误，应为“cut a cake”，表示切蛋糕。

× I think it always memorable and unforgettable.

✓ I think it is always memorable and unforgettable.

缺少系动词“is”，导致句子结构不完整。

× When was a child, I always cried in my birthday because my parents always gave me some surprise.

✓ When I was a child, I always cried on my birthday because my parents always gave me some surprises.

缺少主语“I”，时间状语应为“on my birthday”，且“some surprise”应为复数“some surprises”。

× Every year they give me a lot of gifts such as a remote control helicopter and remote control cars.

✓ Every year they give me a lot of gifts such as a remote control helicopter and remote control car.

“remote control cars”与前面的“a remote control helicopter”保持一致，改为单数“car”。

× In that time, it's very astonishing me.

✓ At that time, it was very astonishing to me.

时间短语应为“at that time”，时态应为过去时“was”，且“astonishing me”表达不当，应为“astonishing to me”。

× When was the child? I think said Brad's birthday is an important ceremony, but now I don't think that because I sing celebrity's birthday can take a lot of my time and cost a lot of money.

✓ When I was a child, I think Brad's birthday was an important ceremony, but now I don't think so because celebrating celebrities' birthdays can take a lot of my time and cost a lot of money.

缺少主语“I”，时态不一致，且“said Brad's birthday”表达不清，应为“Brad's birthday was”，“sing celebrity's birthday”应为“celebrating celebrities' birthdays”。

× So now I like prefer celebrate birthday alone, just eat a small cake.

✓ So now I prefer to celebrate my birthday alone, just eating a small cake.

“like prefer”重复，应选其一；“celebrate birthday”缺少所有格“my”；“just eat”应改为“just eating”以保持句子流畅。

× I think must be the birthday of People Republic of China.

✓ I think it must be the birthday of the People's Republic of China.

“People Republic of China”应为“People's Republic of China”，且缺少冠词“the”。

× You know, in this birthday we called Guo Qingji, it included over 7 days off and it also have a great celebrity.

✓ You know, on this birthday we call it Guo Qingjie, it includes over 7 days off and it also has a great celebration.

“in this birthday”应为“on this birthday”；“called”应为“call”；“included”应为“includes”；“have”应为“has”；“celebrity”用词错误，应为“celebration”。

× It's very astonish.

✓ It's very astonishing.

“astonish”是动词，形容词应为“astonishing”。