Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容丰富且结构清晰，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更流畅自然。例如，可以用“because”或“so”来连接句子，避免句子之间显得断裂。

例: I usually celebrate my birthday by treating myself to a big meal, either at a nice restaurant or at home with my family because it is a special day for me. It marks the beginning of a new year in my life, so I always write down some reflections about the past and set goals for the future.

提案: 回答中有些表达不够自然，如“join the game and cake”不太准确。建议使用更地道的表达，并增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: When I was young, my parents always celebrated my birthday by decorating the house with beautiful flowers. They also prepared a big meal with my favorite dishes, and I invited some of my good friends to join the games and enjoy the cake. It was always very enjoyable.

提案: 回答内容具体且有例子支持，但“happy and enjoyable”搭配不太自然，建议用更合适的形容词表达感受，同时注意句子流畅。

例: Yes, because it can create lasting memories for us. For instance, I still remember the surprise party my parents threw for me when I was 10 years old. The decorations and laughter are still vivid in my mind. Every time I think back to that day, I feel happy and joyful.

提案: 回答中有重复的“because”且有口头语“umm”，影响流畅性。建议去除口头语，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更自然。

例: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is our parents', especially our mothers', because they gave birth to us and have played an important role in supporting and nurturing us throughout our lives. Celebrating their birthdays is a way to show our gratitude and love.

× I think birthday is special for me because it marks the beginning of a new year in my life, so I always write down some reflection about the past and set goals for the future.

✓ I think birthdays are special for me because they mark the beginning of a new year in my life, so I always write down some reflections about the past and set goals for the future.

这里“birthday”应使用复数形式“birthdays”，因为表达的是一般情况的复数概念；“reflection”也应为复数“reflections”，表示多次或多方面的反思。

× They would also prepare a big meal with my favorite dishes and I would invite some of my good friends to join the game and cake.

✓ They would also prepare a big meal with my favorite dishes and I would invite some of my good friends to join the games and cake.

“game”应使用复数形式“games”，因为通常生日聚会中会有多种游戏。

× It was enjoyable.

✓ It was enjoyable.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× The decoration and the laughter are still vivid in my mind.

✓ The decorations and the laughter are still vivid in my mind.

“decoration”应使用复数形式“decorations”，因为通常指多种装饰物。

× Every time when I think back to that day, I would feel happy and enjoyable.

✓ Every time when I think back to that day, I would feel happy and enjoy it.

“enjoyable”是形容词，不能用来描述人的感受，应使用动词“enjoy”表达“感到愉快”。

× I think it must be our parents birthday, especially our mothers, umm because umm.

✓ I think it must be our parents' birthdays, especially our mothers', umm because umm.

“parents birthday”和“mothers”应使用所有格复数形式“parents' birthdays”和“mothers'”，表示属于父母和母亲的生日。