Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、文が長く繰り返しが多いです。文を短くし、接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。また、具体的な料理名などを加えると内容が豊かになります。

例: I usually spend my birthday with my family. We have a homemade dinner where my husband and daughter prepare my favorite dishes, such as grilled salmon and vegetable stir-fry. This cozy celebration makes me feel very happy.

提案: 回答に多くの「あー」や繰り返しがあり、流暢さが欠けています。話す前に簡潔に考え、接続詞を使って文をつなげる練習をしましょう。具体的な思い出や感情を加えると良いです。

例: When I was young, I usually had birthday parties at home with my friends. They brought presents, and we enjoyed eating birthday cake together. Those moments were always fun and made me feel loved.

提案: 文法ミスや不自然な表現が多いです。理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。また、具体的な理由や感情を述べると説得力が増します。

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it reminds me of my life and achievements. I enjoy spending time with my friends, often going to a bar to relax and have fun.

提案: 内容が曖昧で繰り返しが多いです。知らない場合はその旨を簡潔に伝え、推測する際は理由を明確に述べましょう。接続詞を使い、論理的に話す練習が必要です。

例: Although I don't know much about China, I believe that celebrating the birthdays of elderly people is very important there. This is because Chinese culture highly respects older generations.

× my husband and daughter makes me some my favorite food

✓ my husband and daughter make me some of my favorite food

主語が複数（my husband and daughter）なので、動詞も複数形の'make'を使う必要があります。単数形の'makes'は誤りです。

× I usually have a birthday party with my friends.

✓ I usually had a birthday party with my friends.

質問は過去の誕生日についてなので、現在形の'have'ではなく過去形の'had'を使う必要があります。

× my friends usually come to my house and give me a present and eat, uh, present, eat uh, birthday cake with them.

✓ my friends usually came to my house and gave me presents and ate birthday cake with me.

過去の出来事を述べているため、動詞は過去形（came, gave, ate）にする必要があります。また、'present'は複数形の'presents'が適切です。

× It was uh, very fun and cozy time.

✓ It was a very fun and cozy time.

'fun'は形容詞なので冠詞'a'が必要です。過去の出来事なので'time'の前に冠詞を入れます。

× I really enjoy the time with spending with my friends at the bar stay.

✓ I really enjoy spending time with my friends at the bar.

'enjoy'の後は動名詞'spending'を使い、'the time with spending'は不自然です。また、'at the bar stay'は不自然で、'at the bar'が正しい表現です。

× because the I born in this world.

✓ because I was born in this world.

'the I'は誤りで、'I'だけで十分です。また、'born'は受動態の過去分詞なので、'was born'の形にする必要があります。

× I don't know much about China, but I guess the elderly people's birthday is very important to celebrate in China, because in China the thing to look up the elderly people is very important.

✓ I don't know much about China, but I guess the birthdays of elderly people are very important to celebrate in China, because in China respecting elderly people is very important.

'the elderly people's birthday'は複数形の'birthdays'が適切です。また、'the thing to look up the elderly people'は不自然で、'respecting elderly people'が正しい表現です。

× the elderly people's birthday is very important to celebrate in China

✓ the birthdays of elderly people are very important to celebrate in China

'birthday'は複数の人に対して複数形の'birthdays'を使うべきです。また、所有格の使い方よりも'of'を使った表現が自然です。