Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和重复用词，表达不够自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的时态和词汇。

例: When I was a child, I always celebrated my birthday. However, after I turned 16 or 17, I rarely celebrated it because I was usually busy with other things.

提案: 回答中有些语句不连贯，且重复表达。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并避免重复信息。

例: When I was in primary school, I usually invited my classmates to my house. We ordered KFC and celebrated together. They always gave me presents, which made me happy.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但句子结构重复，且部分表达不够自然。建议使用多样的句型和连接词，使表达更流畅。

例: As a child, I thought celebrating my birthday was very important. However, now I have many responsibilities, such as studying English, applying for a PhD, working hard, and resolving personal issues. Therefore, I don't consider it very important anymore.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议理清思路，使用正确的句子结构，并解释俗语的含义。

例: I think a mother's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China. There is a saying that your birthday is like your mother's special day because she gave you life and went through a lot to bring you into the world.

× Uh, when I was a child, I always celebrate for my birthday, but after 16 or 17, I think I never said uh, I never celebrate, celebrate umm, my birthday again.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, I always celebrated my birthday, but after 16 or 17, I think I never celebrated my birthday again.

这里描述过去的习惯动作，应该使用过去时态的动词形式。原句中使用了现在时态的celebrate，应该改为过去时态celebrated。

× I always celebrate for my birthday

✓ I always celebrate my birthday

动词celebrate后面不需要介词for，直接加宾语birthday即可。

× Most of the time I should have a lot of business to do, yes.

✓ Most of the time I have a lot of business to do, yes.

这里表达的是事实或习惯，不需要使用情态动词should，直接用一般现在时态。

× Ha, I've told you that I always celebrate my birthday or when in primary school, I always ask my classmates or friends to come to my home, then we will order the KFC.

✓ Ha, I've told you that I always celebrated my birthday. When I was in primary school, I always asked my classmates or friends to come to my home, then we would order KFC.

描述过去的习惯动作，动词应使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态celebrate和ask，应改为过去时态celebrated和asked。

× then we will order the KFC.

✓ then we would order KFC.

KFC作为品牌名，不需要加定冠词the。

× Well, as a child, I think it's very important, but now it's, it's doesn't matter because I have a lot of things to do.

✓ Well, as a child, I thought it was very important, but now it doesn't matter because I have a lot of things to do.

描述过去的想法时，动词应使用过去时态。原句中think和is应改为thought和was。

× Actually, I think he's mother's birthday.

✓ Actually, I think it's his mother's birthday.

这里指代“他的母亲的生日”，应使用it作为主语，且his表示所属关系。原句中he's是he is的缩写，错误使用。

× So moms give us, give ours lives and many years ago this day they she really suffer.

✓ So moms give us their lives and many years ago on this day they really suffered.

ours是所有格代词，不能用作形容词修饰lives，应改为their。动词suffer应使用过去时suffered。

× many years ago this day they she really suffer.

✓ many years ago on this day they really suffered.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去时态suffered。原句中使用了现在时suffer。