Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap verirken gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimelerden kaçının. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için daha net ve doğrudan ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı 3-4 cümle ile sınırlayarak daha etkili olun.

例: I usually celebrate my birthday with my friends if they have planned something. Otherwise, I spend it with my boyfriend. It depends on the situation, but I always enjoy celebrating with loved ones.

提案: Cümle yapılarınızı daha tutarlı ve doğru hale getirmek için zaman uyumuna dikkat edin. Ayrıca, dolgu kelimeleri azaltarak ve bağlaçlar kullanarak cevaplarınızı daha akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

例: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my friends and family. Now, I also include my boyfriend. We usually go to a nice restaurant to eat something special, and I receive presents. This tradition has remained the same.

提案: Cevabınızı daha etkili yapmak için dolgu kelimeleri azaltın ve daha spesifik detaylar verin. Bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlelerinizi birbirine bağlayın ve daha doğal bir akış sağlayın.

例: Yes, celebrating my birthday is very important to me because it creates special memories. For instance, last year I went to a luxurious restaurant with my university friends and my boyfriend, which made the day unforgettable.

提案: Cevabınızı daha net ve akıcı yapmak için dolgu kelimeleri azaltın ve cümlelerinizi daha doğru yapılarla kurun. Ayrıca, fikrinizi desteklemek için daha fazla detay ve bağlaç kullanın.

例: I'm not completely sure, but I think the president's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because he is the country's leader and represents the nation.

× if there are no any plan

✓ if there is no plan

The phrase 'no any plan' is incorrect because 'any' and 'no' should not be used together. Also, 'plan' is singular, so 'is' should be used instead of 'are'. The correct phrase is 'if there is no plan'.

× It didn't change much, uh, when I was young, I celebrate my birthday with my, uh, friends and family.

✓ It didn't change much, uh, when I was young, I celebrated my birthday with my, uh, friends and family.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Celebrate' should be changed to 'celebrated' to match the past context.

× Now I celebrate it with my friends, family and my boyfriend.

✓ Now I celebrate it with my friends, family, and my boyfriend.

Although the verb tense is correct here (present tense for current habit), a comma is needed before 'and' in a list of three or more items for clarity (Oxford comma). This is a punctuation issue rather than grammar, but it improves readability.

× we usually go somewhere to eat something luxurious at restaurant

✓ we usually go somewhere to eat something luxurious at a restaurant

The noun 'restaurant' requires an article. Since it is a singular countable noun and not specified, the indefinite article 'a' should be used: 'at a restaurant'.

× and they gave me a present and it's still like that.

✓ and they gave me a present and it's still like that.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed.

× I went as some luxurious restaurant with my university friends and my boyfriend.

✓ I went to some luxurious restaurant with my university friends and my boyfriend.

The verb 'went' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating a destination. 'As' is incorrect here.

× but I think it's should be a president's birthday

✓ but I think it should be the president's birthday

The phrase 'it's should be' is incorrect; 'should be' is sufficient. Also, 'a president's birthday' is incorrect because there is only one president in this context, so the definite article 'the' should be used: 'the president's birthday'.