Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Избегайте избыточности и используйте более подходящие слова. Например, "aesthetic coffee" звучит неестественно. Лучше сказать "a cozy café". Также стоит использовать связующие слова для плавности.

例: I usually prefer small birthday parties. For example, I enjoy going to a cozy café with my close family and having a great time celebrating my birthday.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и незавершённые мысли. Следует избегать повторения слов "for instance" и "for example" подряд. Также нужно завершать предложения и использовать связующие слова для логичности.

例: When I was a child, I always celebrated my birthday with my family. We had a tradition of having a small party with cake and many presents. I especially enjoyed these gatherings because they brought us closer together.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и неясные выражения. Следует использовать правильные формы и более чётко выражать мысли. Также стоит добавить связующие слова для связности.

例: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they make a person feel special. Moreover, celebrating creates happy memories that last a long time.

提案: Ответ содержит ошибки и непонятные выражения, например "match our Java". Нужно использовать правильную грамматику и более чётко объяснять традиции, используя связующие слова.

例: In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is a child's first birthday. On this special day, parents usually organize a big party with the extended family.

× I enjoy going to aesthetic coffee with my nuclear family and have a blast to celebrate my birthday.

✓ I enjoy going to an aesthetic coffee shop with my nuclear family and having a blast celebrating my birthday.

The phrase 'going to aesthetic coffee' is incorrect because 'coffee' is a noun that needs a qualifier like 'shop' to indicate a place. Also, 'have a blast to celebrate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'having a blast celebrating' to express enjoyment of the activity. Use of prepositions and gerunds is corrected here.

× I especially enjoyed this gathering because they made.

✓ I especially enjoyed this gathering because they made it special.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'made'. Adding 'it special' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× I think yes, because every person must have a special days or which makes her special and important.

✓ I think yes, because every person must have special days that make them special and important.

'Every person' is singular, so 'special days' should be plural without 'a'. Also, 'which makes her' is incorrect; it should be 'that make them' to agree in number and be gender-neutral.

× For example if you celebrate your birthday very interesting if would be memories.

✓ For example, if you celebrate your birthday in an interesting way, it would create memories.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Adding 'in an interesting way' and correcting the conditional structure clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× In China, the most important birthday of celebrate is typically the first party of child which they match our Java.

✓ In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is typically the first birthday of a child, which is called 'Zhuazhou'.

'Birthday of celebrate' is incorrect; it should be 'birthday to celebrate'. 'First party of child' should be 'first birthday of a child'. 'Match our Java' is unclear; likely intended to refer to 'Zhuazhou', a traditional celebration. Prepositions and noun phrases are corrected.

× For example, in this special day, parents of child makes a very big birthday party with extended family.

✓ For example, on this special day, the parents of the child make a very big birthday party with the extended family.

'Parents' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'parents of child' needs articles: 'the parents of the child'. Prepositions are corrected from 'in' to 'on' for 'day'.