Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite short and contains grammatical errors. Try to form a complete sentence and add more details to make your response natural and effective. For example, mention what kind of party you have or what activities you do during the celebration.

例: I usually have a small party on my birthday with my family and close friends. We enjoy eating cake, playing games, and sharing stories together.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific details about your past birthday celebrations.

例: When I was young, I usually celebrated my birthday with my friends. Before the party, we went to watch a movie together, and after that, we had a small party at my house where we played games and ate snacks.

提案: Your answer has some good ideas but is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and hesitations. Try to express your opinion clearly with supporting reasons, and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

例: I believe it is important to celebrate my birthday because it marks another year of achievements and growth. Celebrating helps me appreciate life and spend quality time with loved ones.

提案: Even if you are not familiar with the culture, try to give a simple opinion or say what you think based on your knowledge. This shows your ability to respond and engage with the question.

例: I am not very familiar with Chinese birthday traditions, but I think that parents' birthdays are very important to celebrate because they take care of the family.

× I usually do party on my birthday with my family and friends.

✓ I usually have a party on my birthday with my family and friends.

The verb 'do' is incorrectly used with 'party'. The correct verb is 'have' when referring to hosting or celebrating a party. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'party' because it is a singular countable noun.

× I went to. I went on party with my friends when I was young and uh, uh, before the party we all friends went for movie and uh, after the, uh, that, uh, we went on.

✓ I went to a party with my friends when I was young. Before the party, all of us friends went to a movie, and after that, we went on.

The phrase 'went on party' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'went to a party' because 'party' is a place/event and requires the preposition 'to' with the article 'a'. Also, 'went for movie' should be 'went to a movie' to correctly use the preposition and article. The sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be split for clarity.

× I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because our life is full of success and uh, uh, it is the day There are the someday on which if we celebrate them, we can enjoy our life, uh.

✓ I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because our life is full of success, and it is a special day. There are some days on which, if we celebrate them, we can enjoy our life.

The phrase 'There are the someday' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'There are some days' to indicate certain days. Also, 'There are' is used correctly here but needs to be followed by a plural noun without 'the' in this context. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Actually, I didn't know about the culture of the China, so I didn't. OK, I didn't give my views about the celebration of the birthday in China.

✓ Actually, I don't know much about the culture of China, so I can't give my views about the celebration of birthdays in China.

The sentence uses past tense 'didn't know' but the context suggests a present lack of knowledge, so present tense 'don't know' is more appropriate. Also, 'the China' is incorrect; 'China' does not require the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'didn't give my views' is awkward; 'can't give my views' fits better to express inability. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' when speaking generally.