Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve verb tense consistency and sentence structure. Use present simple tense for habitual actions and avoid redundancy. Also, add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Every year on my birthday, I usually invite my friends to a nice restaurant for dinner. However, sometimes I spend my birthday at home when a friend volunteers to cook for me.

提案: Use past tense consistently when talking about the past. Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your ideas. Add linking words to improve coherence.

例: When I was young, I didn't usually celebrate my birthday because we were poor and couldn't afford food or cake. However, I was happy whenever someone greeted me.

提案: Maintain consistent verb tenses and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific reasons.

例: Yes, I believe celebrating my birthday is important because it allows me to be grateful for another year of life. Therefore, I always thank God on my birthday for giving me this opportunity.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, vary your vocabulary and add linking words to enhance coherence.

例: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are those of our parents, as it is a way to thank them for giving us life and supporting us throughout our lives.

× Every year during my birthday, I usually invited my friends to come over for dinner at a nice restaurant.

✓ Every year during my birthday, I usually invite my friends to come over for dinner at a nice restaurant.

The sentence uses 'invited' which is past tense, but 'usually' indicates a habitual action, so the present tense 'invite' should be used instead.

× Sometimes I spend my birthday at home when one of my friends will volunteer to cook for me.

✓ Sometimes I spend my birthday at home when one of my friends volunteers to cook for me.

The phrase 'will volunteer' is incorrect here because the subordinate clause describing a habitual action should use the present simple tense 'volunteers'.

× When I was young, I don't usually celebrate my birthday because we were poor and we cannot afford to buy food or cake.

✓ When I was young, I didn't usually celebrate my birthday because we were poor and we could not afford to buy food or cake.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time frame is in the past ('When I was young'), the verbs should be in past tense: 'didn't' and 'could not'.

× I I am. I'm happy when somebody greets me, but that's all.

✓ I was happy when somebody greeted me, but that's all.

The phrase 'I I am' is incorrect and redundant. Also, since the context is past, 'am' should be 'was' and 'greets' should be 'greeted' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I always thank God whenever I celebrated my birthday because He gives me another.

✓ I always thank God whenever I celebrate my birthday because He gives me another.

The phrase 'whenever I celebrated' incorrectly uses past tense; it should be present tense 'whenever I celebrate' to indicate a repeated action. Also, 'gives' is correct in present tense as it refers to a general truth.