Birthday— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, more coherent and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid short fragments like “Partying, clubbing.”

例: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family at home, having dinner together. However, the following weekend I often go out with friends to a club or a party, so I can enjoy both a quiet family time and a lively night out.

提案: Correct grammar and give a specific example to make the answer natural and informative. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a detail using a linking word (for example, “for instance” or “usually”).

例: When I was young, my mother always organized birthday parties for me. For instance, she would invite all my classmates, decorate the house and bake a cake, so we could play games and sing together.

提案: Use formal spoken English rather than casual phrasing, correct collocations, and explain your reason with a linking word. Keep it to one clear topic sentence plus one supporting reason.

例: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it makes me feel appreciated. Moreover, it gives me a chance to reflect on the past year and spend quality time with people who matter to me.

提案: Answer the question directly even if you are not living there; give a brief opinion and a reason. Start with a topic sentence stating whose birthday you think is most important, then support it with a cultural reason or example.

例: Although I don't live in China, I think a parent's birthday is usually the most important to celebrate because Chinese culture places strong emphasis on filial respect. For example, children often organize family gatherings or give meaningful gifts to show appreciation.

× I usually spend my time with my family on my birthdays and in the next weekend I'm celebrating my birthday with my friends at night. Partying, clubbing.

✓ I usually spend time with my family on my birthday, and next weekend I'm going to celebrate my birthday with my friends at night, partying and clubbing.

Errors: inconsistent plural 'birthdays' when speaking of one birthday habit and awkward time phrase 'in the next weekend'. Use singular 'birthday' for a general habit and 'next weekend' or 'next weekend I'm going to celebrate' for a planned future event. Combine fragments into one sentence and connect activities with 'and'. Suggestion: use 'usually spend time' for habitual actions and 'next weekend I'm going to...' for near-future plans.

× When I were young, my mom was doing me birthday parties, calling all of my friends.

✓ When I was young, my mom used to throw me birthday parties and invited all of my friends.

Errors: incorrect past form 'were' for singular first person (should be 'was'); awkward progressive 'was doing me birthday parties' and wrong verb 'doing' for hosting; 'calling all of my friends' is better as 'invited all of my friends' for completed past actions. Suggestion: use 'When I was young' and 'used to throw me birthday parties' or 'my mom threw birthday parties for me'.

× Yeah, I'm taking my birthdays really serious because I think I can only feel special for one day and then I'm a normal person.

✓ Yeah, I take my birthday very seriously because I think I can only feel special for one day and then I'm a normal person.

Errors: incorrect progressive 'I'm taking my birthdays' for a general preference — use simple present 'I take'; plural 'birthdays' is odd when referring to the concept in general, use singular 'birthday'; adjective/adverb error 'really serious' should be 'very seriously' (adverb modifying verb). Suggestion: use simple present for habits and 'seriously' as adverb.

× I am not living in China.

✓ I do not live in China.

Error: 'I am not living in China' is grammatically acceptable but sounds odd for a general state; simple present 'I do not live in China' better fits the question about whose birthday is important in China. Also 'not living' can imply temporary situation. Suggestion: use simple present to state residence facts.