Relax— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific details about the place you go to relax.

例: Recently, I often go to a famous Japanese garden to relax because I enjoy being surrounded by nature. When I see the flowers and trees, I feel very happy and peaceful, which helps me unwind after a busy day.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use linking words to explain why you feel relaxed with that person, and provide specific details about your relationship.

例: I usually relax with my best friend, Call. She knows me very well, so when we spend time together, I feel comfortable and at ease because we share a strong friendship.

提案: Your answer shows understanding but has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Use correct verb forms, link your ideas clearly, and provide specific examples of how music helps you relax.

例: Yes, I think listening to music is very relaxing. For example, when I listen to calm music while studying or working, I feel happier and less stressed, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains pronunciation and grammatical errors. Provide a clear topic sentence, use linking words to add details, and be specific about your reading habits and preferences.

例: To relax, I often read books in my room. I especially enjoy mystery novels because they are exciting and keep me engaged, which helps me forget about stress.

× Oh, when I want to feel relaxed, I often go change it going Where is the famous Japanese guarding? Because I like seeing some nature be 'cause when I see some nature and flowers, I feel very happy. So I feel.

✓ Oh, when I want to feel relaxed, I often go to a famous Japanese garden because I like seeing nature. When I see nature and flowers, I feel very happy.

The original sentence is confusing and contains sentence structure errors, including unclear phrases like 'go change it going' and 'Where is the famous Japanese guarding?'. The correction simplifies and clarifies the sentence to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I often go change it going Where is the famous Japanese guarding?

✓ I often go to a famous Japanese garden.

The phrase 'go change it going Where is the famous Japanese guarding?' is incorrect. The correct preposition after 'go' when referring to a place is 'to'. Also, 'guarding' is a mishearing or misspelling of 'garden'.

× Because I like seeing some nature be 'cause when I see some nature and flowers, I feel very happy.

✓ I like seeing nature because when I see nature and flowers, I feel very happy.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' and then repeating 'be 'cause' is redundant and incorrect. The sentence should use 'because' once to connect the clauses properly.

× I feel when I'm, when I'm with you, my best friend whose name is a call, I feel very relaxed be 'cause she's know about for me, know about me very well.

✓ I feel very relaxed when I'm with my best friend whose name is Call because she knows me very well.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has awkward phrasing like 'she's know about for me'. The correction uses the correct pronouns and verb forms for clarity.

× So we're very friend.

✓ So we're very good friends.

'Very friend' is incorrect; 'friend' is a noun and needs an adjective like 'good' to describe the relationship properly.

× I think listening to music is helpful for us to relaxing because will I? A listening to music I felt very happy and relaxed, so I often listening music while studying and working in the.

✓ I think listening to music is helpful for us to relax because when I listen to music, I feel very happy and relaxed, so I often listen to music while studying and working.

Incorrect use of gerunds and verb forms such as 'to relaxing', 'will I?', 'A listening', and 'listening music'. The correction uses the correct infinitive 'to relax' and verb forms 'listen' and 'listening' appropriately.

× I often listening music while studying and working in the.

✓ I often listen to music while studying and working.

The phrase 'listening music' is incorrect; the correct form is 'listen to music'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'in the', which is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× I often read some books when I feed raxit because I like reading many books, especially my favorite genre is mystery, so I often read it.

✓ I often read some books when I feel relaxed because I like reading many books. My favorite genre is mystery, so I often read it.

'Feed raxit' is a misspelling of 'feel relaxed'. The sentence also has run-on structure and unclear phrasing, which is corrected by splitting into clearer sentences and correcting prepositions.