Relax— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn.

例: I usually go to the library to relax because it is peaceful there. I enjoy reading books that interest me, which helps me learn new things and understand the world better.

提案: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt cho tự nhiên hơn. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lỗi sai về cấu trúc câu và từ vựng. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

例: I usually relax with my friends because they understand me well. Since we are the same age, I feel comfortable sharing my thoughts and feelings with them.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ như động từ số nhiều 'music play' nên là 'music plays'. Bạn cũng nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách thêm ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể hơn.

例: Absolutely yes. Music plays an important role in our lives because it helps us relax and unwind after a long day. For example, I often listen to soft music to reduce stress.

提案: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ. Ví dụ, 'I often reading books' nên là 'I often read books'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để thể hiện khả năng tiếng Anh tốt hơn.

例: I often read books to relax because it is my favorite hobby. Reading helps me feel calm and also allows me to learn new information.

× I often go to the library because this is really peaceful and I can find some book that I like and find out many knowledge that I don't know about so I can explain what is happening or what is going on.

✓ I often go to the library because it is really peaceful and I can find some books that I like and learn a lot of knowledge that I don't know about so I can explain what is happening or what is going on.

The word 'book' should be plural 'books' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'knowledge' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'many'. Instead, use 'a lot of knowledge' or 'much knowledge'. Additionally, 'this' should be replaced with 'it' to refer to the library properly.

× I often relax my stressful with my friends because they are so comfortable with what is happening with me and I can tell them everything that I really straightforward about.

✓ I often relieve my stress with my friends because they are so understanding about what is happening to me and I can tell them everything that I am really straightforward about.

The phrase 'relax my stressful' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve my stress'. Also, 'comfortable with what is happening with me' should be 'understanding about what is happening to me' to express empathy. The preposition 'about' is more appropriate than 'with' in this context.

× Additionally, they are the same age with me so they can understand what I'm saying.

✓ Additionally, they are the same age as me so they can understand what I'm saying.

The correct preposition to compare age is 'as' not 'with'. So, 'the same age as me' is correct.

× You know, music play an important role in our life.

✓ You know, music plays an important role in our life.

The subject 'music' is singular, so the verb should be 'plays' to agree in third person singular form.

× Moreover, it can help you feel relaxed and unwind after studying hard.

✓ Moreover, it can help you feel relaxed and unwind after studying hard.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no changes needed.

× I often reading books because book is my favorite things that I often do.

✓ I often read books because books are my favorite things to do.

The verb 'reading' should be in base form 'read' after 'often'. Also, 'book' should be plural 'books' to match 'things'. The phrase 'that I often do' is awkward; 'to do' is more natural here.

× Additionally is help me relax a lot and find out many knowledge.

✓ Additionally, it helps me relax a lot and learn a lot of knowledge.

The sentence is missing a subject 'it'. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject. 'Find out many knowledge' is incorrect; 'learn a lot of knowledge' is better. Also, a comma is needed after 'Additionally'.