Relax— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and use a clear topic sentence followed by one specific detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat “relax” too much). Also give a short example or reason to sound natural.

例: I haven't had much free time lately because I've been very busy with work. However, if I could take a break, I would go to the countryside because the quiet, green environment helps me unwind. For example, I enjoy walking by fields and listening to birds, which clears my mind.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases like “all the time” and improve grammar (e.g., “helps me become more confident”).

例: I usually relax alone because I find solitude refreshing. For instance, spending time by myself gives me space to think and helps me become more confident in my decisions.

提案: Provide a full sentence answer rather than a short interjection, correct grammar (music makes), and give a specific example and linking phrase to support your view. Use varied vocabulary like “soothing” or “calming.”

例: Yes, I do. Music can be very calming and helps reduce stress. For example, when I'm under pressure at work, listening to slow instrumental music helps me focus and feel less anxious.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I like to travel when I have a week off"), and limit to one main idea with a specific detail or example. Use linking words to make it coherent and avoid repeating phrases.

例: I like to travel when I have a week off, especially to rural areas because they refresh my mind. For example, staying in a small village and taking long walks in nature helps me recharge for returning to work.

× I recently very busy to work so I don't have enough time to go relax.

✓ I have been very busy with work recently, so I don't have enough time to relax.

The sentence needs present perfect continuous/simple to show a recent ongoing situation and correct verb forms. 'Recently' with 'very busy' requires a linking verb: 'have been'. Also use 'with work' not 'to work', and 'relax' without 'go' or 'go relax' can be simplified to 'relax'. Use commas to join clauses. Suggestion: Use 'have been' + adjective for recent states ('I have been very busy with work recently').

× But if I have the chance to go relax, I would definitely go somewhere away from the city because I prefer rural side which can make me more relaxing.

✓ If I had the chance to relax, I would definitely go somewhere outside the city because I prefer the rural side, which helps me feel more relaxed.

The sentence expresses a hypothetical present situation so the second conditional (if + past simple, would + base verb) is appropriate: 'If I had the chance... I would...'. Use 'outside the city' or 'away from the city' and include the definite article 'the' with 'rural side'. 'Which can make me more relaxing' is incorrect: use 'helps me feel more relaxed' (adjective) rather than 'relaxing' (verb/participle). Suggestion: use correct conditional form and change 'relaxing' to 'relaxed'.

× I prefer to go alone as I know that being alone can make me learn how to be more confident all the time.

✓ I prefer to go alone because being alone helps me learn to be more confident.

Use 'because' rather than 'as' for clearer spoken reasons. 'Can make me learn how to be more confident all the time' is awkward and wordy. Use 'helps me learn to be more confident' — 'helps' is the correct verb and 'learn to' is the correct structure. Omit 'all the time' unless you mean constantly; if so, say 'more confident all the time' but normally 'more confident' suffices.

× Exactly. Music really make people relaxing.

✓ Exactly. Music really makes people feel relaxed.

Subject-verb agreement: singular 'music' requires 'makes' not 'make'. 'Relaxing' is an adjective describing the music, but the intent is that music causes people to feel relaxed, so use 'feel relaxed'. Suggestion: 'Music really makes people feel relaxed'.

× For example, when they are in a busy schedule, they need some music to relax.

✓ For example, when they have a busy schedule, they need music to relax.

'Be in a busy schedule' is incorrect; use 'have a busy schedule' or 'are in a busy period'. 'Some music' is acceptable but 'music' without 'some' is more natural here. Use present simple 'have' for general situations. Suggestion: 'when they have a busy schedule'.

× I like to go travel if I have the chance to take a week or few week leave because away from the city to rural side definitely can refresh my mind.

✓ I like to travel if I have the chance to take a week or a few weeks' leave because getting away from the city to the rural area definitely refreshes my mind.

Use 'travel' (not 'go travel') or 'go travelling'. 'A week or a few weeks' requires articles and plural 'weeks' and possessive 'weeks' leave' or rephrase 'a week or a few weeks' leave'. 'Away from the city to rural side' needs 'getting away from the city to the rural area' and include 'the'. 'Can refresh my mind' is okay but present simple 'refreshes' sounds more natural for habitual statements. Suggestion: 'I like to travel if I can take a week or a few weeks' leave; getting away from the city to the rural area refreshes my mind.'