Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且注意语法的正确性。回答应更自然流畅，避免无意义的内容。

例: Yes, I like eating cakes and other sweet foods because I have a sweet tooth. For example, I often enjoy chocolates and pastries as treats.

提案: 回答中提到了相关内容，但表达不完整且缺少具体细节。建议补充完整句子，增加具体描述，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes, such as mooncakes and rice cakes. Mooncakes are especially popular during the Mid-Autumn Festival because they symbolize reunion and happiness.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用简单句子表达自己的能力和经历，避免无关内容，保持回答简洁明了。

例: I can't make cakes very well because I am not good at cooking. I have tried a few times, but I often make mistakes with the ingredients.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议使用完整句子，清晰表达过去的喜好和原因，并避免模糊的时间表达。

例: Yes, I liked eating cakes, chocolates, and ice cream when I was a child because they made me happy. However, I stopped eating too many sweets later because it was unhealthy.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议注意单词拼写和语法，表达时更自然流畅，避免重复和不连贯的句子。

例: No, I usually don't eat desserts after meals because I feel too full. However, I sometimes enjoy having a small dessert before meals to stimulate my appetite.

× Yes, I like eat cakes and I also like other sweet foods because I am crazy about crazy for the sweet.

✓ Yes, I like eating cakes and I also like other sweet foods because I am crazy about sweets.

动词like后面应接动名词形式，表示喜欢做某事。这里应使用"like eating"而不是"like eat"。另外，"crazy about crazy for the sweet"表达重复且不正确，应简化为"crazy about sweets"。

× But I am done or encounter some questions which are difficulties.

✓ But I have encountered some difficulties.

句子结构混乱，"done or encounter"用法错误，应使用完成时态"have encountered"来表达经历过困难。

× I like to eat something sweet like the cakes or chocolates.

✓ I like to eat something sweet like cakes or chocolates.

冠词the在此处不合适，cakes和chocolates为泛指，去掉the更自然。

× I think after I take a bite of them I can.

✓ I think after I take a bite of them, I feel happy.

句子不完整，缺少谓语，需补充完整表达。

× Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes in China, such as the mooncakes and moonbeam cakes.

✓ Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes in China, such as mooncakes and moonbeam cakes.

在列举时，冠词the不应加在复数名词前，去掉the更符合习惯用法。

× These cakes are enjoyed during festivals because they have special flavors and unique meanings.

✓ These cakes are enjoyed during festivals because they have special flavors and unique meanings.

句子无语法错误，无需修改。

× For example, the mooncakes are popular during.

✓ For example, mooncakes are popular during the Mid-Autumn Festival.

句子不完整，缺少时间状语，需补充完整。

× Now I can't make it because I am poor at cooking but I try.

✓ Now I can't make it because I am poor at cooking, but I try.

句子中缺少逗号，连接两个分句。

× Tried it several times before.

✓ I have tried it several times before.

句子缺少主语，且时态应为现在完成时，表示过去发生的经历。

× I put the flour together and mix them and gin and put them in the oven.

✓ I put the flour together and mix it, then put it in the oven.

flour是不可数名词，代词应使用it而非them；"gin"可能为拼写错误，应删除或更正。

× But I filled and felt frustrated because I visited ingredients.

✓ But I failed and felt frustrated because I missed some ingredients.

"filled"应为"failed"表示失败；"visited ingredients"用词错误，应为"missed some ingredients"表示遗漏材料。

× My mother chose me not to go to the even animal because I am.

✓ My mother chose for me not to go to the event because I am not good at it.

句子不完整且用词错误，"even animal"应为"event"，且需补充完整原因。

× Yes, when I was a child I really like it.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really liked it.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态。

× Sweet things like the cake, chocolate and ice cream.

✓ Sweet things like cake, chocolate and ice cream.

列举时不需要冠词the，且cake作为不可数名词不加冠词。

× I think it can make me happy and I was fond of eating jam in the evening about.

✓ I think it can make me happy and I was fond of eating jam in the evening.

句尾"about"多余，应删除。

× It was really unhealthy schedule so I gave it up later in my life.

✓ It was really an unhealthy habit, so I gave it up later in my life.

"unhealthy schedule"表达不当，应为"unhealthy habit"，且句子中缺少冠词an。

× No, I don't like how some deserts after meals because I always eat a lot during the survey meals.

✓ No, I don't like to have some desserts after meals because I always eat a lot during the main meals.

"how some deserts"表达错误，应为"to have some desserts"；"survey meals"应为"main meals"。

× For example, after lunch I feel so full that there isn't enough room for even a bite of desert.

✓ For example, after lunch I feel so full that there isn't enough room for even a bite of dessert.

"desert"拼写错误，应为"dessert"，表示甜点。

× But I would like to eat some desert before meals because I think it can stay stimulate.

✓ But I would like to eat some dessert before meals because I think it can stimulate my appetite.

"stay stimulate"用法错误，应为"stimulate"；"desert"拼写错误，应为"dessert"。