Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để tránh lỗi như 'help me to more concentrate'. Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc đúng và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I really enjoy eating cakes and other sweet foods, especially chocolate, because they help boost my mood and improve my concentration when I study or work.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, câu 'It's usually made from filling the green beans or red beans with and had a rough shape' chưa chính xác. Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để nối các ý và tránh câu ngắn rời rạc.

例: Yes, there are many traditional cakes. I think the most popular one is the mooncake, which is usually filled with green bean or red bean paste and has a round shape symbolizing unity. People often eat it during the Mid-Autumn Festival to celebrate the harvest and family reunion.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần chú ý chính tả và ngữ pháp như 'Sometime' nên là 'Sometimes', 'families' nên là 'family'. Bạn cũng nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I can. Sometimes, when I have free time on weekends or holidays, I enjoy baking cakes or cookies for my family and friends. I usually learn new recipes on the Internet and try to use healthy ingredients so that my treats are both delicious and good for them.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, chỉ cần chú ý sử dụng thì cho phù hợp trong câu cuối, nên dùng 'ate' thay vì 'eat' để đồng nhất thì quá khứ.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my parents often bought cakes for me as a reward when I got good scores at school. However, they also warned me not to eat too much because cakes are unhealthy, so I only ate them occasionally.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý dùng danh từ số nhiều hoặc số ít đúng cách, ví dụ 'dessert such a chocolate cakes' nên là 'desserts such as chocolate cake'. Ngoài ra, từ 'certifies' không phù hợp trong ngữ cảnh này, nên dùng từ khác phù hợp hơn. Hãy dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy eating desserts such as chocolate cake or ice cream after meals because I have a sweet tooth. However, my parents often encourage me to eat more fruit instead, as it is healthier and better for digestion.

× Eating sweet food help me to boost my mood and help me to more concentrate on studies and working.

✓ Eating sweet food helps me to boost my mood and helps me to concentrate more on studies and work.

The subject 'Eating sweet food' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' instead of 'help'. Also, 'help me to more concentrate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'helps me to concentrate more'. Additionally, 'working' should be 'work' to match the noun form parallel to 'studies'.

× It's usually made from filling the green beans or red beans with and had a rough shape.

✓ It's usually made by filling it with green beans or red beans and has a rough shape.

The original sentence has incorrect structure and missing words. 'Made from filling the green beans or red beans with' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'made by filling it with green beans or red beans'. Also, 'had a rough shape' should be 'has a rough shape' to maintain present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Shape symbolizing unity.

✓ The shape symbolizes unity.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb. Adding the verb 'symbolizes' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× People often eat it and meet Autumn festival to celebrate the harvest and family reunion.

✓ People often eat it and meet during the Autumn Festival to celebrate the harvest and family reunion.

The phrase 'meet Autumn festival' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'during' to indicate the time of the festival. Also, 'Autumn festival' should be capitalized as 'Autumn Festival'.

× Sometime when I have free time on the weekends or holiday, I enjoy baking cakes or cookies for my families and friends.

✓ Sometimes when I have free time on the weekends or holidays, I enjoy baking cakes or cookies for my family and friends.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to match 'weekends'. 'Families' should be singular 'family' because it refers to the speaker's own family.

× I usually learn new recipes on Internet and I try to use healthy ingredients so that my treats are both delicious and good for them.

✓ I usually learn new recipes on the Internet and I try to use healthy ingredients so that my treats are both delicious and good for them.

The phrase 'on Internet' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'on the Internet'.

× However, they also warned me not to eat it too much because cakes are unhealthy, so I only eat them occasionally.

✓ However, they also warned me not to eat it too much because cakes are unhealthy, so I only ate them occasionally.

The sentence is about past events, so 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to maintain consistency.

× I enjoy eating dessert such a chocolate cakes or ice cream after meals because it certifies my sweet tooth.

✓ I enjoy eating desserts such as chocolate cakes or ice cream after meals because it satisfies my sweet tooth.

'Dessert' should be plural 'desserts' to match 'such as chocolate cakes or ice cream'. 'Such a' is incorrect; it should be 'such as'. 'Certifies' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'satisfies' in this context.

× However, my parents often encourage me to eat more fruit instead as it is healthier and better for digestion.

✓ However, my parents often encourage me to eat more fruit instead, as it is healthier and better for digestion.

A comma is needed before 'as' to separate the clauses properly.