Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ancak biraz daha yapılandırılmış ve akıcı olabilir. "And with raspberries" ifadesi cümlenin sonunda aniden geliyor ve bağlaç kullanımı eksik. Daha fazla detay ve bağlaç kullanarak cevabınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I really enjoy sweet foods, especially brownies because I absolutely adore chocolate. Moreover, I like them when they are paired with raspberries, which add a nice tartness.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve tekrarlar var. "I will try to try it" ifadesi yerine daha doğal bir ifade kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçları daha doğru kullanarak cümlenizi akıcı hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: I'm not familiar with traditional Chinese cakes because I've never been to China. However, if I have the chance, I would definitely like to try them since I enjoy exploring new dishes.

提案: Cümlenizde gereksiz tekrarlar ve bağlaç hataları var. "But I however I suggest" ifadesi karışık. Daha net ve akıcı cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, cevabınızı biraz daha detaylandırabilirsiniz.

例: Actually, I'm not a great cook, but if necessary, I can make a cake. However, I wouldn't recommend eating it because I'm still learning.

提案: Cevabınız açık ve anlaşılır ancak biraz daha özgünlük ve detay ekleyebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, "like to eat cakes" ifadesini daha doğal hale getirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I loved eating cakes as a child because of their sweet and rich flavors. I believe most children enjoy cakes, and I was no exception.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlamsal karışıklıklar var. "Avoid it from my everyday life" yerine daha doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğal hale getirmek için bağlaçlar ekleyebilirsiniz.

例: I really enjoy desserts, but I'm trying to avoid them in my daily diet because they can harm my skin and negatively affect my blood health.

× Yeah, I like sweet food so much and I love brownies because I literally adore chocolates. And with raspberries.

✓ Yeah, I like sweet food so much and I love brownies because I literally adore chocolate. And with raspberries.

The word 'chocolates' is plural, but here it refers to the substance in general, so the uncountable noun 'chocolate' should be used instead.

× I don't know about Chinese cakes because I have never been in China, but if there is a traditional Chinese cake, I will try to try it. Hence I like to try new dishes.

✓ I don't know about Chinese cakes because I have never been to China, but if there is a traditional Chinese cake, I will try it. Hence, I like to try new dishes.

The correct preposition with 'been' when referring to visiting a place is 'to' not 'in'. Also, 'try to try it' is redundant; 'try it' is sufficient. A comma after 'Hence' improves sentence clarity.

× Actually I am not a wonderful cook, but if I have to of course I can do it. But I however I suggest you not to eat it.

✓ Actually, I am not a wonderful cook, but if I have to, of course I can do it. However, I suggest you not eat it.

The phrase 'if I have to of course I can do it' needs commas for clarity. 'But I however' is redundant; 'However' alone is sufficient. Also, 'suggest you not to eat it' should be 'suggest you not eat it' because 'suggest' is followed by the base verb without 'to'.

× Yeah, of course I like to eat cakes. I like the flavor of the cakes, and I'm pretty sure that every child likes to eat cakes.

✓ Yeah, of course I liked to eat cakes. I liked the flavor of the cakes, and I'm pretty sure that every child likes to eat cakes.

The question is about the past ('Did you like... as a child?'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'liked' to match the time frame.

× I am really into desserts but I'm trying to avoid it from my everyday life because I know it poisons my skin and it's uh, negative for my blood too so I don't really want to eat it.

✓ I am really into desserts but I'm trying to avoid them in my everyday life because I know they harm my skin and are, uh, bad for my blood too, so I don't really want to eat them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'desserts' (plural), so 'them' should be used. Also, 'avoid it from my everyday life' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in'. 'Poisons my skin' is better expressed as 'harm my skin', and 'negative for my blood' should be 'bad for my blood' for naturalness.