Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I used to love eating cakes as a child because their sweetness motivated me to study harder; however, now I eat them less often as I prefer healthier snacks.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but could be improved by using correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid repeating 'I think' multiple times.

例: Yes, traditional Chinese cakes such as rice cakes and mooncakes are popular in East Asian countries like Japan and Korea; however, they are less well known in European countries like France and the UK.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve it by using more natural expressions and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I can't make cakes at the moment because I haven't baked any in the last 10 to 15 years; however, I did bake muffins with my friends during a high school trip to experience British culture.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Avoid incomplete expressions like 'preference for alcoholic' and try to be more specific. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I loved eating cakes as a child because my mother was excellent at making scones and muffins; however, as I grew older, I stopped eating sweet foods and developed a preference for alcoholic drinks.

提案: Your answer is mostly clear but contains a confusing phrase 'after oily cuisine like milk and fish.' Try to be more precise and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: No, I usually avoid desserts after meals to stay healthy; however, I sometimes drink a glass of milk, especially after eating oily foods like fish, to feel refreshed.

× Yes, there is some traditional Chinese cakes called rice cakes and mooncakes.

✓ Yes, there are some traditional Chinese cakes called rice cakes and mooncakes.

The subject 'cakes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number. 'Some' indicates plural, so 'are' is the correct form of the verb 'to be' here.

× However, I think they are less well known in European countries like French or the UK.

✓ However, I think they are less well known in European countries like France or the UK.

'French' is an adjective or a demonym, but here a country name is needed. The correct country name is 'France' to match 'European countries'.

× However, as I grew older, I stopped eating such sweet foods because I developed a preference for alcoholic.

✓ However, as I grew older, I stopped eating such sweet foods because I developed a preference for alcoholic drinks.

The word 'alcoholic' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Adding 'drinks' completes the phrase and makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× However, I sometimes drink a glass of milk, especially after oily cuisine like milk and fish, to refresh my mind.

✓ However, I sometimes drink a glass of milk, especially after oily cuisine like meat and fish, to refresh my mind.

'Milk' is not a type of cuisine. The intended meaning is likely 'meat', which is a common oily cuisine. Using 'milk' here is incorrect as a prepositional object.