Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，存在重复和犹豫词汇，建议减少“umm”等填充词，避免重复表达，句子结构应更简洁流畅。

例: Yes, I like cakes and other sweet foods, especially when I'm feeling down because they help improve my mood.

提案: 回答不够明确且语法错误较多，建议直接回答问题并尝试提供具体信息，避免模糊表达。

例: Yes, there are traditional Chinese cakes like mooncakes and rice cakes, which are popular during festivals.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，且重复使用“umm”，建议练习正确时态和句子结构，减少犹豫词，表达更清晰。

例: I have tried making cakes before, but it was challenging because the process is quite complicated, so I didn't have a good experience.

提案: 回答中存在重复和犹豫词，建议简洁表达并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I liked eating cakes as a child and I still enjoy them now because sweets help me feel better and relieve stress.

提案: 回答表达不够流畅，存在重复和犹豫词，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，表达更自然。

例: Yes, if I feel a bit hungry after a meal, I usually have some dessert to satisfy my appetite.

× Yes, I like it. Cakes or other sweet foods, umm when I feel when I feel not good and I want to eat some sweets because it will make me feel better.

✓ Yes, I like them. Cakes or other sweet foods, umm, when I feel not good, I want to eat some sweets because they make me feel better.

这里的代词“it”用来指代复数名词“cakes or other sweet foods”不正确，应该用复数代词“them”。另外，句子中重复了“when I feel”，需要删去重复部分。

× Yes, I think so, but I'm not really realize traditional Chinese cakes.

✓ Yes, I think so, but I don't really realize traditional Chinese cakes.

这里“I'm not really realize”结构错误，动词“realize”前应使用助动词“do”构成否定句，且时态应为一般现在时。

× Umm, I'm make cakes before, but umm, I think it is not a perfect cake because umm, the step is very complex.

✓ Umm, I've made cakes before, but umm, I think it was not a perfect cake because umm, the steps were very complex.

“I'm make”时态错误，应使用现在完成时“I've made”表示过去经历。后半句中“step”应为复数“steps”，且描述过去情况时动词应使用过去时“were”。

× Umm I think it is not a good experience.

✓ Umm, I think it was not a good experience.

这里描述的是过去的经历，动词时态应使用过去时“was”。

× Yes, I like to eat cakes as a child and now I like, I still like it.

✓ Yes, I liked to eat cakes as a child and now I still like them.

“as a child”表示过去，动词应使用过去时“liked”。“I still like it”中“it”指代复数“cakes”，应使用复数代词“them”。

× Cakes, umm, sweets can make me feel good, umm, it can release my stress.

✓ Cakes, umm, sweets can make me feel good, umm, they can release my stress.

“it”指代复数名词“cakes, sweets”不正确，应使用复数代词“they”。

× Yes, if I'm hungry and when I finish my meal I think, I think umm, a little hungry, I will eat some sweets.

✓ Yes, if I'm hungry and when I finish my meal, I think, umm, I'm a little hungry, I will eat some sweets.

句中缺少主语“I”在“a little hungry”前，应补充“I am”使句子完整。