Cakes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免语法错误，如“taste well”应为“taste good”，并且表达更自然流畅。可以简洁直接表达喜好，并说明原因。

例: Yes, I like eating cakes and other sweet foods because they taste delicious and can improve my mood.

提案: 回答中应避免使用不连贯的连接词，如“for instance, and”，并且注意单复数一致。描述应更具体，连接词使用更自然。

例: Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes. For example, mooncakes are popular during the Mid-Autumn Festival; they are sweet and shaped like a moon.

提案: 回答较好，但可以使用更自然的表达方式，如“too many steps”前加连接词，使句子更连贯。

例: Actually, I can't make cakes by myself because it is quite complex and there are too many steps involved.

提案: 注意单词拼写错误，如“threat”应为“treat”，并且表达应更自然，避免重复。

例: Yes, I really enjoyed eating cakes as a child. They were often a special treat during birthdays and other important occasions, which made them even more enjoyable.

提案: 句子结构不够自然，建议使用更简洁连贯的表达，避免“it is very perfect and for me to have it”这类冗余表达。

例: Yes, I enjoy having desserts after meals because they help me relax and feel satisfied.

× I think cakes taste well and it can help me improve my mood and feel satisfied with this.

✓ I think cakes taste good and they can help me improve my mood and feel satisfied with this.

这里“taste”后面应该用形容词“good”而不是副词“well”，因为“taste”是连系动词，后面接形容词来描述主语的状态。此外，主语“cakes”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“can”，即“they can”。

× I think cakes taste well and it can help me improve my mood and feel satisfied with this.

✓ I think cakes taste good and they can help me improve my mood and feel satisfied with this.

“cakes”是复数，代词应使用复数形式“they”而不是单数“it”，以保持主谓一致。

× Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes that are quite popular, for instance, and moon cakes are commonly eaten during the Mid Autumn festival.

✓ Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes that are quite popular. For instance, moon cakes are commonly eaten during the Mid Autumn festival.

原句中“for instance”前后连接不当，导致句子结构混乱。应将句子拆分为两句，使表达更清晰。

× And it is very sweet, its shape is like a moon.

✓ They are very sweet, and their shape is like a moon.

“moon cakes”是复数，代词应使用复数形式“they”和“their”，以保持主谓一致。

× Actually, I can't make cakes by myself because I think it is complex for me to make it and there are too many steps.

✓ Actually, I can't make cakes by myself because I think it is complex for me to make them and there are too many steps.

“cakes”是复数，代词应使用复数形式“them”而不是“it”，以保持一致。

× Cakes were often a special threat during birthdays and some important days, which made them even more delightful.

✓ Cakes were often a special treat during birthdays and some important days, which made them even more delightful.

“threat”是“威胁”的意思，语境中应使用“treat”（款待、享受）一词，表达正确含义。

× Yes, I do enjoy having desserts after meals, it is very perfect and for me to have it because it often helps me relax.

✓ Yes, I do enjoy having desserts after meals. It is perfect for me to have them because they often help me relax.

原句为复合句，逗号连接两个独立分句，属于逗号拼接错误。应拆分为两个句子，并且代词“it”应改为复数“them”，以对应“desserts”。