Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，语法和词汇使用不准确，建议练习简单句型表达，避免重复和语法错误。

例: Yes, I sometimes use coins, but most of the time I pay with electronic apps on my phone, like Apple Pay.

提案: 表达不清晰，句子结构混乱，建议使用简单明了的句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, coins are convenient because I use them to pay for small items, and vendors don't need to give change.

提案: 句子结构和时态使用不准确，建议注意时态一致性，并用更准确的词汇描述经历。

例: Yes, I collected coins when I was a child. I also kept them in chocolate boxes and liked coins from different countries.

提案: 表达不流畅，语法错误较多，建议练习句子连接和词汇准确使用。

例: Yes, I always carry coins when I go out because they are useful for paying parking fees or vending machines, and they are easier to use than credit cards.

× Yes, I use a coin so.

✓ Yes, I use coins.

这里的coin应该用复数形式coins，因为表示一般使用硬币的习惯，而不是单个硬币。

× Sometimes, but most of the time I paid by electrical.

✓ Sometimes, but most of the time I pay by electronic means.

这里描述的是现在的习惯动作，应该用一般现在时pay，而不是过去时paid。

× Apps such as iPhone apps and. Electrical car down the phone so coin I used.

✓ I use apps such as iPhone apps and electronic payment on the phone instead of coins.

句子结构混乱，electrical car down the phone无意义，应改为electronic payment on the phone，且句子应完整表达意思。

× Yes, it is very convenient to use the coins that because when you have to, but I have to pay small things, I use the coins.

✓ Yes, it is very convenient to use coins because when I have to pay for small things, I use coins.

句子中that和but使用不当，且you和I混用，应统一主语为I，去掉多余的that和but。

× A soul at the vendor don't have to change it.

✓ So at the vendor, I don't have to get change.

原句中a soul用词错误，应为so，且表达“找零”应使用get change。

× With the coins for me.

✓ Using coins is convenient for me.

原句不完整且表达不清，需补充完整句子，coins为复数形式。

× Yes I have a collected coins when I was a child and the I also collected the chocolate boxes which I is a place that I put all the collected coins and I like different countries currency.

✓ Yes, I collected coins when I was a child, and I also collected chocolate boxes which were places where I put all the collected coins. I like currencies from different countries.

have a collected错误，应为过去式collected；句子结构混乱，I is错误，应改为were；句子应拆分为多个完整句子。

× Do you carry coins when you go out?

✓ No correction needed.

该句无语法错误。

× Yes, I always carry coins or when I go out there because of when I need to pay for random machining or parking fees.

✓ Yes, I always carry coins when I go out because I need to pay for random machines or parking fees.

or when I go out there表达不清，应去掉or；random machining应为random machines。

× Coin is much easier than credit card and.

✓ Coins are much easier to use than credit cards.

coin和credit card应使用复数形式coins和credit cards，且句子不完整需补充。

× The coins are can be. Easy to carry.

✓ Coins can be easy to carry.

原句结构混乱，are can be错误，应改为can be，且句子应连贯。