Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、"uh"の多用を避け、文法的な誤り（"a much faster"ではなく"much faster"）を修正するとより良くなります。また、文を簡潔にまとめることも意識しましょう。

例: I rarely use coins nowadays because I prefer cashless and smartphone payments, which are much faster and more convenient than using physical money.

提案: "uh"の多用を控え、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。また、接続詞を使って論理的に話をつなげると良いでしょう。例えば、"However"や"because"を適切に使うことが大切です。

例: I don't find coins very convenient, but they are useful when buying drinks from vending machines because cashless payments are not accepted there.

提案: 内容が不明瞭で文法的な誤りが多いです。趣味や経験について具体的に説明し、文法を正しく使う練習が必要です。例えば、"I collected coins related to NFL"のように簡潔に述べましょう。

例: Yes, I collected coins related to the NFL when I was a kid. It was my hobby and helped me learn more about American football and its players.

提案: "uh"の多用を避け、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。また、"casual payments"や"smart home payments"は意味が不明瞭なので、正しい語彙を使うことが重要です。

例: Yes, I usually use cashless payments, but I carry 5 or 6 coins to pay at small shops or vending machines where electronic payments are not accepted.

× I hardly use coins now. However I use uh, cashless payments and smartphone payments almost everyday because it is a much faster and more convenient than using physical money.

✓ I hardly use coins now. However, I use cashless payments and smartphone payments almost every day because they are much faster and more convenient than using physical money.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning 'commonplace' and should be 'every day' as two words to mean 'each day'. Also, 'it is a much faster and more convenient' is incorrect because 'payments' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they are'. This is a subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference issue.

× But in some cases, for example, buying beverages on vending machine coins is uh, very useful because uh, uh, in such case we cannot use uh, cashless payments.

✓ But in some cases, for example, buying beverages from vending machines using coins is very useful because in such cases we cannot use cashless payments.

The phrase 'buying beverages on vending machine coins' is incorrect. The correct prepositions are 'from vending machines' and 'using coins'. Also, 'in such case' should be plural 'in such cases' to match the context.

× Yes, I have collected coins which illustrates the assets of NFL in American sports.

✓ Yes, I collected coins which illustrated the assets of the NFL in American sports.

The sentence refers to a past activity, so simple past tense 'collected' is appropriate rather than present perfect 'have collected'. Also, 'illustrates' should be past tense 'illustrated' to match the past context. Additionally, 'the NFL' needs the definite article 'the'.

× This was my hobbies and helped me understand the the member of and the enjoyment of NFL.

✓ This was my hobby and helped me understand the members of and the enjoyment of the NFL.

'Hobbies' is plural, but 'was' is singular, so 'hobby' (singular) should be used. Also, 'the member of' is incorrect; it should be 'the members of'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'NFL'.

× Yes, I usually use casual payments, but uh, in that case I cannot use uh, smart home payments.

✓ Yes, I usually use cashless payments, but in that case I cannot use smart phone payments.

'Casual payments' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'cashless payments'. Also, 'smart home payments' is incorrect; it should be 'smartphone payments'. These are vocabulary errors related to prepositions and word choice.

× Uh, I carry 5 or 6 coins so that I can uh, pay money for small businesses or vending machines.

✓ I carry five or six coins so that I can pay for small purchases or vending machines.

Numbers under ten are usually written in words in formal writing. Also, 'pay money for small businesses' is incorrect; it should be 'pay for small purchases' or 'pay small amounts'. The phrase 'pay money for small businesses' is semantically incorrect.