Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“we often use mobile phone to pay for goods”应为“we often use mobile phones to pay for goods”。建议注意主谓一致和复数形式的使用，同时句子结构应更简洁自然。

例: Not usually. With the development of technology, we often use mobile phones to pay for goods. However, older people who don't have mobile phones may still use coins.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“coins is too heavy”应为“coins are too heavy”，且“you need to share that a lot of coins”表达不明确。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，避免重复和模糊表达。

例: Not really. Coins are too heavy for me, and you need to carry a lot of them in daily life to pay for goods, which is inconvenient.

提案: 回答中时态和语法错误较多，如“I'd really like to collected”应为“I really liked collecting”，“when I travel”应为“when I traveled”。建议注意时态一致，句子结构清晰，并使用恰当的词汇表达。

例: Definitely. I really liked collecting coins when I was a kid, especially souvenir coins from abroad or other provinces.

提案: 回答中存在重复词汇和表达不完整的问题，如“coins are quite sparky”不合适，且句子未完整表达意思。建议避免重复，使用准确词汇，并确保句子完整连贯。

例: Not really. Coins are inconvenient to carry because you often need many of them to pay for small items, which can be troublesome and heavy.

× With the development of society and technology we often use mobile phone to pay for goods, but in elder people who don't have mobile phones they may use now.

✓ With the development of society and technology we often use mobile phones to pay for goods, but elderly people who don't have mobile phones may still use coins now.

这里“mobile phone”应使用复数形式“mobile phones”，因为指的是一般情况中的多部手机。

× but in elder people who don't have mobile phones they may use now.

✓ but elderly people who don't have mobile phones may still use coins now.

“elder”用作形容词时通常用于比较级，表示“更年长的”，此处应使用“elderly”表示“年长的”人。

× Not really, coins is too heavy for me and you need to share that a lot of coins in your daily life then you can afford to afford to pay for the goods.

✓ Not really, coins are too heavy for me and you need to carry a lot of coins in your daily life so that you can afford to pay for the goods.

“coins”是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式“are”。

× you need to share that a lot of coins in your daily life then you can afford to afford to pay for the goods.

✓ you need to carry a lot of coins in your daily life so that you can afford to pay for the goods.

“share”用法不当，应改为“carry”表示携带；“then”连接词用法不当，应改为“so that”表示目的。

× Definitely, I'd really like to collected coins where when I was a little kid, especially when I travel abroad or other province I like to connect there souvenir coins.

✓ Definitely, I really liked to collect coins when I was a little kid, especially when I traveled abroad or to other provinces I liked to collect souvenir coins.

“collected”应为动词原形“collect”与“like to”搭配；“travel”应使用过去式“traveled”；“connect”用词错误，应为“collect”；“there”应为“their”；“province”应为复数“provinces”。

× especially when I travel abroad or other province I like to connect there souvenir coins.

✓ especially when I traveled abroad or to other provinces I liked to collect their souvenir coins.

“to”是表示方向的正确介词；“there”应为所有格“their”；“connect”应为“collect”。

× Not really, coins are quite sparky and inconvenient to carry out.

✓ Not really, coins are quite bulky and inconvenient to carry.

“sparky”用词不当，应为“bulky”表示笨重；“carry out”通常指“执行”，此处应简化为“carry”。

× You you often need to use a lot of coins to buy to pay for small items, which can be troublesome in daily life and it's it's too heavy for me to.

✓ You often need to use a lot of coins to pay for small items, which can be troublesome in daily life and it's too heavy for me too.

重复词“you you”和“it's it's”应删除；“buy to pay”结构错误，应简化为“pay”；“too”位置应放在句尾。