Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Use correct grammar, for example, say 'coins are not an important factor these days' instead of 'coins is not imperative factor'. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons.

例: No, I don't use coins much nowadays because most people prefer virtual payments, which are more convenient and faster.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Coins can be convenient for small purchases because they are easy to use, but nowadays, many people prefer cards for convenience.

提案: Improve clarity by organizing your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repetition and use correct grammar. Explain your experience with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I tried collecting coins as a child after watching a cartoon about it, but I stopped because it became too troublesome.

提案: Make your answer more fluent and clear by avoiding filler words and incomplete sentences. Use a clear topic sentence and explain your reasons with specific details and linking words.

例: No, I don't carry coins when I go out because I prefer to use a single card that can be used for many payments, which is more convenient.

× coins is not imperative factor in these days

✓ coins are not an imperative factor these days

The subject 'coins' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'imperative factor' needs an article 'an' before it. 'In these days' is better expressed as 'these days' without 'in'.

× many people use umm umm, virtual account

✓ many people use virtual accounts

'Many people' implies plural, so 'virtual account' should be pluralized to 'virtual accounts' to match the plural subject.

× coins are not imperative factors

✓ coins are not an imperative factor

'Imperative factor' is a singular noun phrase, so it should be 'an imperative factor' even though 'coins' is plural. The phrase refers to the concept of coins being an important factor, so singular is appropriate.

× maybe a coin is convenient, convenient than cards or bills

✓ maybe a coin is more convenient than cards or bills

The comparative form 'more convenient' is needed to compare 'a coin' with 'cards or bills'. Also, 'convenient' is repeated unnecessarily.

× coins are not imperative factors

✓ coins are not an imperative factor

Same as previous explanation: 'imperative factor' should be singular with article 'an'.

× the main character collected Co according to their future

✓ the main character collected coins according to their future

'Co' seems to be a typo or incomplete word; it should be 'coins' to make sense in context.

× I did some that well but I gave I gave up that it's very annoying

✓ I did that well but I gave up because it was very annoying

The sentence has tense inconsistency and repetition. 'Did some that well' is awkward; 'did that well' is better. 'I gave I gave up that' is repetitive and incorrect; 'I gave up because it was very annoying' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I just have one card that is more important than several coins

✓ I just have one card that is more important than several coins

This sentence is correct in singular/plural usage; no correction needed here.

× One 'cause if I have one card that has I, I can, uh, address many

✓ Because if I have one card, I can use it for many things

The original sentence is unclear and has incorrect pronoun and word usage. 'One 'cause' is informal and confusing; 'that has I, I can, uh, address many' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning with proper pronouns and structure.