Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, using simple and correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then briefly explain your point.

例: Yes, I sometimes use coins, but mostly I use digital payments because they are more convenient in today's digital era.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, try to avoid informal expressions like '1 by 1' and use more precise vocabulary.

例: Not really, because we have to count coins individually, which makes the payment process inefficient and slow.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Make sure to answer directly and clearly. Use simple sentences and explain your reasons logically with linking words.

例: No, I did not collect coins as a child because I was not interested in collecting things. I preferred using bank cards instead.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains repetition and minor errors. Try to avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I always carry coins when I go out because they are useful if electronic payment devices are unavailable.

× Yes, I use going occasionally because in digital era I constantly always use curious at a virtual and banking.

✓ Yes, I use coins occasionally because in the digital era I constantly use virtual banking.

The original sentence misuses 'use going' which is incorrect; 'use coins' is appropriate. The phrase 'constantly always use curious at a virtual and banking' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It should be 'constantly use virtual banking' to express frequent use of online banking. Also, 'in digital era' needs the definite article 'the' before 'digital era'. The sentence is corrected to improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Then coins are physically money.

✓ Then coins are physical money.

The phrase 'physically money' is incorrect because 'physically' is an adverb, but here an adjective 'physical' is needed to describe 'money'. Also, 'coins are physical money' is the correct form to express that coins are tangible currency.

× Not really because we need to count it 1 by 1, so I think it's not efficient if we wanted to pay it.

✓ Not really because we need to count them one by one, so I think it's not efficient if we want to pay with them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'coins', which is plural, so 'them' is correct. Also, '1 by 1' should be written as 'one by one' for clarity. The verb tense 'wanted' should be present tense 'want' to match the context. 'Pay it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pay with them'.

× No, I have not collected when I was kid because I'm typically.

✓ No, I did not collect coins when I was a kid because I am not typical.

The present perfect 'have not collected' is incorrectly used with a specific past time 'when I was a kid'; simple past 'did not collect' is appropriate. 'When I was kid' is missing the article 'a'. The phrase 'I'm typically' is unclear and likely incorrect; it is corrected to 'I am not typical' but context is limited, so this part is adjusted for grammatical correctness.

× And if you do not really love about collection and I prefer to always using banking.

✓ And I do not really love collecting coins, so I prefer always using banking.

The phrase 'love about collection' is incorrect; the correct form is 'love collecting coins'. The conjunction 'and' is incorrectly used to connect two independent clauses; 'so' is more appropriate here to show cause and effect. 'Prefer to always using' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer always using' or 'prefer to always use'.

× Yes, of course. I always carry coins when I go on because I think when when electronic device are unavailable I can use coin too.

✓ Yes, of course. I always carry coins when I go out because I think when electronic devices are unavailable I can use coins too.

The phrase 'go on' is incorrect in this context; 'go out' is the correct expression for leaving the house. 'Electronic device' should be plural 'electronic devices' to match the context. 'Use coin' should be plural 'use coins' to agree with the plural subject. Also, the repeated word 'when' is a typographical error and is corrected.