Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and using linking words for better flow. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: No, I rarely use coins nowadays because most people prefer digital payments, which are more convenient. Moreover, many shops accept cashless transactions, so I usually use a mobile app to make quick and secure purchases.

提案: Good direct answer with relevant examples. To improve, you could add a linking word to connect your ideas smoothly and enrich your response slightly.

例: Yes, it is convenient to use coins, especially for small purchases like snacks or bus fares, because they are easy to carry and quick to use.

提案: Your answer is detailed and personal, which is good. To improve, try to use linking words to connect your ideas more coherently and avoid repeating similar points.

例: Of course, I collected coins as a kid. I had a huge collection because my grandparents gave me old and rare coins, and this hobby was quite popular among my friends.

提案: Your answer is relevant and well explained. To improve, try to use linking words like 'also' or 'furthermore' to connect your reasons smoothly and keep the answer concise.

例: No, I usually do not carry coins when I go out because they can be heavy. Also, I prefer digital payments since many shops favor cashless transactions, which are more convenient and secure.

× No, I rarely use coins these days because many people prefer digital payments which are more convenient and many shops and services now accept cashless transactions.

✓ No, I rarely use coins these days because many people prefer digital payments, which are more convenient, and many shops and services now accept cashless transactions.

The original sentence is mostly correct but lacks commas before 'which' and before 'and' to separate clauses clearly. Adding commas improves readability and clarity, which is important in English grammar.

× Yes, it is convenient to use coins, especially for small purchases like snacks or bus fares because they are easy to carry and quick to use.

✓ Yes, it is convenient to use coins, especially for small purchases like snacks or bus fares, because they are easy to carry and quick to use.

A comma is needed before 'because' to separate the main clause from the reason clause, improving sentence clarity and flow.

× Of course I collected coins.

✓ Of course, I collected coins.

A comma after 'Of course' is necessary to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, which is a punctuation rule that aids clarity.

× When I was a kid, I had a huge collection of coins and my grandparents used to give me old and rare coins, and this hobby was very popular among my friends.

✓ When I was a kid, I had a huge collection of coins, and my grandparents used to give me old and rare coins. This hobby was very popular among my friends.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence. Splitting it into two sentences improves readability and grammatical correctness. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate independent clauses.

× No, I usually do not carry coins when I go out because they can be heavy to carry around.

✓ No, I usually do not carry coins when I go out because they can be heavy to carry around.

This sentence is grammatically correct and requires no changes.

× Besides, I prefer using digital payments because many shops and services now favor cashless transactions which are more convenient and secure.

✓ Besides, I prefer using digital payments because many shops and services now favor cashless transactions, which are more convenient and secure.

A comma is needed before 'which' to separate the relative clause, improving sentence clarity and correctness.