Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然且直接，但可更精练并增加具体细节与连贯词。避免重复（例如“coins”出现频繁），并用一两句具体场景说明何时仍会使用硬币。可用连接词（e.g. however, although, so）让句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I still use coins, but not often. I usually pay with Apple Pay because carrying coins makes my wallet heavy; however, I keep a few coins for small purchases like bus fares or street snacks.

提案: 回答结构清晰，但有些冗长与小语法问题。可用连接词（for example, on the other hand）改善衔接，并把重复词简化。同时补充更具体的细节（例如大约需要多少时间或频率）。

例: It depends. For example, in supermarkets I find coins inconvenient because searching for exact change slows me down; on the other hand, coins are handy at vending machines since they often only accept cash.

提案: 内容有趣但表达不够准确与连贯，并有语法与逻辑问题（时态、冠词、复数）。应直接说明过去习惯并用清楚的因果和细节（例如谁参与、收集多少种、收藏的持续时间）。

例: Yes, I collected coins as a child after watching a popular 2009 Hong Kong drama. The main character carried a five-dollar coin, so my family and I started keeping similar coins; I remember we had about a dozen different designs.

提案: 回答直接且自然，但可更精炼並加入频率或替代方案（e.g. usually never, except sometimes）以增强信息量。用更流畅的连接词替代重复表达。

例: I usually don't carry coins because they’re heavy, but I do bring some on certain occasions, such as when I know I might use a vending machine or need exact change for public transport.

× I do use coins, but not very often.

✓ I do use coins, but not very often.

原句语法本身没有现在分词错误。这里的“do”是用于强调，结构正确。无需修改。

× Coins are very heavy when I keep them in my wallet so I usually use online payment like Apple Pay.

✓ Coins are very heavy when I keep them in my wallet, so I usually use online payment methods like Apple Pay.

原句中“online payment”用于泛指支付方式时应为可数复数或加上修饰词，建议改为“online payment methods”。另外句子中间需要逗号连接两独立分句。建议使用复数形式并加逗号以使表达更自然。

× It depends.

✓ It depends.

单句“It depends.”本身正确，无需修改。

× I find it inconvenient to use coins when shopping in the supermarket because it takes a long time for me to find the appropriate coins.

✓ I find it inconvenient to use coins when shopping in supermarkets because it takes me a long time to find the appropriate coins.

原句中“the supermarket”作为泛指应使用复数“supermarkets”或去掉定冠词，且“It takes a long time for me to...”的常用更自然表达是“It takes me a long time to...”，建议改为此结构以提高地道性。

× But if I'm purchasing on the vending machine, coins are very convenient because coins are the only acceptable.

✓ But if I'm buying from a vending machine, coins are very convenient because coins are the only acceptable form of payment.

原句问题有三处：1）“purchasing on the vending machine”搭配不当，应为“buying from a vending machine”；2）“the vending machine”若泛指可用不定冠词“a vending machine”；3）“coins are the only acceptable”不完整，应补全为“the only acceptable form of payment”。以上改动使句子语法完整且用词自然。

× Yes, I think I've collected coins because of one of the most popular drama in Hong Kong in 2009.

✓ Yes, I think I collected coins because of one of the most popular dramas in Hong Kong in 2009.

原句时态与冠词使用不当：1）使用现在完成时“I've collected”与具体时间“in 2009”冲突，涉及过去具体时间应使用一般过去时“I collected”；2）“drama”作为可数名词在此应使用复数“dramas”或保留单数时加不定冠词“a drama”。因此改为“one of the most popular dramas”更合适。

× The main character always carries a $5 coins with him.

✓ The main character always carried a $5 coin with him.

原句错误包括：1）金额词与复数名词不搭配，应为“a $5 coin”而非“a $5 coins”；2）叙述过去发生的事情应使用过去时“carried”。因此将动词改为过去时并将名词改为单数。

× So for my families we collected.

✓ So my family and I collected them.

原句“for my families we collected”在多处不自然：1）“families”不应复数，应用“family”或说“My family and I”；2）句子缺少宾语“them”（指代硬币）。建议改为“My family and I collected them.”，语序与指代更清晰。

× I don't really carry coins when I go out because it's very heavy, but in some occasions I do, for example when I have to buy something on the vending machines, I do bring coins with me.

✓ I don't really carry coins when I go out because they're very heavy, but on some occasions I do. For example, when I have to buy something from a vending machine, I bring coins with me.

原句问题包括：1）主语与代词不一致，“coins”复数应使用“they're”而非“it's”；2）“in some occasions”搭配不当，应为“on some occasions”；3）“buy something on the vending machines”应为“buy something from a vending machine”；4）句子较长，拆分为两句更清晰。以上修改使语法、搭配和指代一致性得到改善。