Coins— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Отвечайте прямo и последовательно: начните с короткого утверждения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных детали. Избегайте повторов и ненужных вставок (например, «so I can say», «we we»). Следите за временем глаголов и артиклями (например, «pay just in cash»).

例: Yes, I still use coins at school. For example, the canteen only accepts cash, so when I don't have banknotes I pay with coins. However, I usually try to carry small notes to avoid needing many coins.

提案: Давайте ясный главный ответ, затем поддержите его конкретным объяснением. Уберите повторяющиеся слова и незавершённые фразы. Используйте связки («however», «for example») правильно и давайте законченную мысль.

例: I think coins can be convenient for small purchases, but they have drawbacks. For example, coins make noise in pockets and are bulky, so I prefer banknotes or cards for most purchases.

提案: Отвечайте грамотно и полно: используйте правильные формы глаголов и завершайте мысль. Если рассказываете о прошлом, используйте Past Simple. Приводите конкретный пример (что именно вы собирали, почему бросили).

例: Yes, I tried to collect coins when I was a child, but I gave up after a while. Many interesting or rare coins were expensive and hard to find, so it became difficult to continue the collection.

提案: Давайте краткий, связный ответ: прямое утверждение + причина. Избегайте гипербол и условных конструкций, которые звучат неестественно. Используйте простые условия правильно (If I carried coins, I would...).

例: No, I rarely carry coins because I often forget them. If I remembered to take coins, I would find it more convenient for small purchases, but usually I prefer to use a card.

× So I can say that I usually use coins in my school because we we should pay just a cash, but I often don't have some money and that's why I use coins.

✓ I usually use coins at my school because we should pay with cash, but I often don't have much money, so I use coins.

Multiple issues: extra repeated word 'we', incorrect prepositions 'in my school' -> 'at my school' (11), incorrect article and noun combination 'a cash' -> 'cash' or 'with cash' (22/11), quantifier 'some money' -> 'much money' (14). Suggestions: remove duplicate words, use 'at' for places like school, say 'pay with cash' and choose appropriate quantifier 'much' or 'a little'.

× So in my opinion that's using coins might be convenient, but it's often very noisy because for example when you jump coins will will be noisy and just.

✓ In my opinion, using coins might be convenient, but they are often very noisy; for example, when you drop coins they make a lot of noise.

Incorrect word order and choice: unnecessary 'that's' before gerund (26), subject-pronoun mismatch 'using coins might be convenient, but it's often very noisy' -> refer to coins with 'they' (12/27), verb form 'when you jump coins will will be noisy' is ungrammatical; correct is 'when you drop coins they make a lot of noise' (6/8). Suggestions: remove 'that's', use 'they' to refer to coins, use 'drop' instead of 'jump' and 'make a lot of noise'.

× I can say that I tried to collected coins when I was a child, but it was very difficult idea because I tried to do it but usually very unique coin paid a lot of money. But I.

✓ I tried to collect coins when I was a child, but it was a difficult idea because the rare coins cost a lot of money.

Past tense errors and verb form: 'tried to collected' should be 'tried to collect' (5/9). Article and adjective use: 'very unique coin' -> 'rare coins' (13/17). Incorrect verb 'paid a lot of money' -> 'cost a lot' (5). Suggestions: use base form after 'tried to', use 'rare' instead of 'unique' in this context, and use 'cost' when talking about price of coins. Also remove unfinished fragment 'But I.'

× So I can say that I have the worst memory in the world. That's why I rarely carry coins when I go out. But I think that if I would do it, I will the best person in the world.

✓ I have the worst memory in the world, so I rarely carry coins when I go out. But I think that if I did, I would be the best person in the world.

Conditional and tense errors: 'if I would do it' is incorrect; in second conditional use past tense in 'if' clause and 'would' in main clause: 'if I did, I would be' (7/6). Also punctuation and connector improvements: combine sentences with 'so'. Suggestions: use correct conditional structure (if + past, would + base), and 'be' after 'would'.