Fishing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「How many Japanese people are like fishing」は不自然で、「Many Japanese people like fishing」のように言い換えるべきです。また、文のつながりも不明瞭で、接続詞の使い方を改善する必要があります。より自然で効果的な回答を目指しましょう。

例: Yes, fishing is very popular in my country because many Japanese people enjoy eating fish. Moreover, cities like Tokyo, Nagoya, and Osaka are close to the sea, so people can easily access the seashore to fish.

提案: 回答は内容が豊富ですが、文が長くなりすぎており、繰り返しや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「because when I was a child I had to eat fish almost everyday because my grandfather was a fisherman」は「because my grandfather was a fisherman, I ate fish almost every day when I was a child」のように整理できます。文を短くし、論理的なつながりを明確にしましょう。

例: Yes, I like eating fish. When I was a child, I ate fish almost every day because my grandfather was a fisherman. Eating fish helped me stay healthy because it is very nutritious.

提案: 回答に多くの「あいまいな言葉」や「うーん」などのフィラーが含まれており、流暢さが低いです。また、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現もあります。例えば、「very near area from the sea as so」は「a very close area to the sea」などに修正が必要です。フィラーを減らし、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I have been to the fish market many times. When I was 25, I lived near the sea and visited the market at least once a week. There, I could find many rare seafood items.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「our cities like Tokyo, Osaka and Nagoya is the closest to the sea」は「are close to the sea」に修正すべきです。また、「how many people can easily access to the seashore and get some fish?」は疑問文の形になっており不適切です。文を正しく構成し、自然な表現を心がけましょう。

例: Yes, fishing is popular in my country because many Japanese people enjoy eating fish. Also, cities like Tokyo, Osaka, and Nagoya are close to the sea, so many people can easily go fishing.

× How many Japanese people are like fishing because simply they like eating fish

✓ Many Japanese people like fishing because they simply like eating fish

'How many' is used for questions, but here the sentence is a statement. Also, 'are like fishing' is incorrect; it should be 'like fishing'. The phrase 'many Japanese people' correctly expresses the plural subject.

× other cities like Tokyo, Nagoya and Osaka is a very close to the sea

✓ other cities like Tokyo, Nagoya and Osaka are very close to the sea

The subject 'cities' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'a very close' is incorrect; 'very close' is an adjective phrase that does not need an article.

× people can easily access to the seashore

✓ people can easily access the seashore

The verb 'access' is transitive and does not require the preposition 'to'. Saying 'access to' is incorrect.

× there are too many fish and some items from the sea which made my body very healthy

✓ there were too many fish and some items from the sea which made my body very healthy

The sentence refers to the past ('when I was a child'), so 'were' is appropriate. However, this is more a past tense issue, but since the problem is with 'there are' vs 'there were', it is related to singular/plural and tense. The plural 'fish' is correct here.

× there are too many fish and some items from the sea which made my body very healthy

✓ there were too many fish and some items from the sea which made my body very healthy

The sentence describes a past situation, so the verb 'are' should be in past tense 'were' to maintain tense consistency.

× I lived in umm, very near area from the sea

✓ I lived in a very near area to the sea

The phrase 'near area from the sea' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'to' after 'near area'. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'very near area'.

× our cities like Tokyo, Osaka and Nagoya is the closest to the sea

✓ our cities like Tokyo, Osaka and Nagoya are the closest to the sea

The subject 'cities' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× how many people can easily access to the seashore

✓ many people can easily access the seashore

'How many' is used for questions, but this is a statement. Also, 'access' does not require 'to'. So, 'many people can easily access the seashore' is correct.