Fishing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然，但表达不够准确，"aged men"应为"older men"或"elderly men"，且句子结构稍显重复。建议使用更准确的词汇，并简化句子结构，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, fishing is quite popular in my country, especially among older men. They often go fishing after a busy day to relax and share their thoughts with their friends or family.

提案: 表达存在语法错误和用词不当，如"add with fishbone in my throat"不通顺。建议使用更准确的表达方式，简洁明了地说明原因。

例: Actually, I don't like eating fish because it's troublesome to remove the bones, and I'm afraid of choking on them.

提案: 回答内容丰富，但句子较长且结构松散，"help her burden the heavy boxes"表达不自然。建议分句表达，使用更自然的短语。

例: Yes, I have been to the fish market with my mother to help carry heavy boxes. I noticed there was a wide variety of fresh seafood, and the lively atmosphere made the visit enjoyable.

提案: 回答重复且用词不准确，如"aged middle men"不明确。建议避免重复，使用准确词汇，并简化句子结构。

例: Yes, fishing is popular in my country, especially among middle-aged men. They find it peaceful to fish by the lake after a busy day and often share their feelings with their partners.

× Yes, I think fishing is very popular in my country, especially for those aged men.

✓ Yes, I think fishing is very popular in my country, especially for aged men.

“those aged men”中的“those”多余且不符合习惯表达，直接用“aged men”即可，避免复数指代错误。

× They often go to fishing after a busy day and share their worries or happy moments with their partners.

✓ They often go fishing after a busy day and share their worries or happy moments with their partners.

“go to fishing”是不正确的搭配，正确表达是“go fishing”，即去钓鱼。

× Actually, I don't like eating fish because I think it is too troublesome for me to pick up the fishbone and I also have the opportunity to add with fishbone in my throat.

✓ Actually, I don't like eating fish because I think it is too troublesome for me to pick out the fishbones and I also might get a fishbone stuck in my throat.

“pick up the fishbone”应为“pick out the fishbones”，表示挑出鱼刺；“have the opportunity to add with fishbone in my throat”表达不当，改为“might get a fishbone stuck in my throat”更自然。

× Yes, I have been to the fish market with my mother to help her burden the heavy boxes and at this time I saw there is a variety of fresh seafood available and the lively atmosphere makes the experience quite enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I have been to the fish market with my mother to help her carry the heavy boxes, and at that time I saw there was a variety of fresh seafood available, and the lively atmosphere made the experience quite enjoyable.

“help her burden the heavy boxes”用词不当，应为“help her carry the heavy boxes”；“at this time”应为“at that time”；“there is”时态错误，应为过去时“there was”；“makes”应为过去时“made”，保持时态一致。

× Yes, fishing is very popular in my country, especially for the aged middle men.

✓ Yes, fishing is very popular in my country, especially for the middle-aged men.

“aged middle men”词序错误，正确表达是“middle-aged men”，表示中年人。

× For them, it is very quiet and comfortable to go to fishing after a busy day by the lake and can share their worries or happy moments with their partner.

✓ For them, it is very quiet and comfortable to go fishing after a busy day by the lake and share their worries or happy moments with their partners.

“go to fishing”应为“go fishing”；“can share”前缺主语，应与前句主语保持一致，去掉“can”更流畅；“partner”应为复数“partners”，与前文“them”对应。