Fishing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevabınız doğal ve anlamlı ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime kullanımı var. "There was a lot fishes" yerine "There were a lot of fish" demelisiniz. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha akıcı bağlaçlar kullanarak ifadelerinizi güçlendirebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I really enjoy eating fish, especially tuna and salmon. When I was younger, I used to go fishing with my father at Garrison Lake, where there were plenty of fish. However, nowadays, the fish population has decreased significantly, so we no longer go there.

提案: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi ve kelime hataları mevcut. "for by some bait" ifadesi yanlış, doğru kullanım "to buy some bait" olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha tutarlı bağlaçlar kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz.

例: Yes, when we go fishing, we usually stop at the fish market to buy some bait before heading to other lakes. For example, I got my first fishing rope from a store whose owner was a friend of my father.

提案: Cevabınızda dilbilgisi ve cümle yapısı sorunları var. Cümleleriniz tamamlanmamış ve anlam bütünlüğü zayıf. "Fishing in traditional" ifadesi yanlış, "Fishing is a traditional activity" şeklinde olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve bağlaçlar kullanarak daha net ifade edin.

例: Yes, fishing is very popular in my country, especially during the summer. Many people enjoy going to lakes or the sea using nets or boats. In fact, fishing is a traditional activity in Istanbul because locals often spend their free time doing it.

× There was a lot fishes in there, but nowadays there isn't.

✓ There were a lot of fish in there, but nowadays there aren't.

The word 'fish' is an uncountable noun when referring to the animal in general, so 'a lot fishes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'a lot of fish'. Also, 'there was' should be 'there were' to agree with the plural noun 'fish'. Similarly, 'there isn't' should be 'there aren't' to match the plural subject.

× when we're going to fishing we usually stop at the fishing market for by some bait and go to other lakes.

✓ when we go fishing we usually stop at the fish market to buy some bait and go to other lakes.

The phrase 'going to fishing' is incorrect; it should be 'go fishing'. 'Fishing market' is better expressed as 'fish market'. The phrase 'for by some bait' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'to buy some bait'. These preposition and verb form errors affect the sentence clarity.

× The owner was friend of my father.

✓ The owner was a friend of my father.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'friend'. This is not a pronoun error but an article error; however, since the problem is related to the noun phrase, it is corrected here. The pronoun 'my' is used correctly.

× especially during the summer many people enjoy going to lakes or the sea using Nets or the boats In fact, fishing in traditional.

✓ especially during the summer, many people enjoy going to lakes or the sea using nets or boats. In fact, fishing is traditional.

The sentence lacks commas for clarity. 'Nets' and 'boats' should not be capitalized. The phrase 'fishing in traditional' is incorrect; it should be 'fishing is traditional'. The preposition 'in' is wrongly used here.

× Fishing in Istanbul is traditional activity because we're local spent their free time often in the.

✓ Fishing in Istanbul is a traditional activity because locals often spend their free time there.

The original sentence has multiple structural errors: missing article 'a' before 'traditional activity', incorrect pronoun usage 'we're local' instead of 'locals', incorrect verb form 'spent' instead of 'spend', and incomplete phrase 'in the' which should be 'there'. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.