Laughing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer covers good points about laughter's benefits, but it is a bit repetitive and could be clearer. Try to avoid repeating words and keep your sentences concise and natural. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Laughter helps me reduce stress and improve my mood. Moreover, it can boost the immune system and enhance overall well-being, making it an essential part of a healthy lifestyle.

提案: Your answer is quite long and confusing due to repetition and unclear details. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words to make your story coherent and specific.

例: I laughed yesterday when my mom was talking to my grandparents. They shared a funny story about walking in the neighborhood and finding a stray cat. They even fed it some food, which made me smile.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some repetition and could be more natural. Try to use linking words and vary your vocabulary to make your answer more engaging and clear.

例: Yes, I do because I enjoy sharing interesting stories from my daily life with my friends. This helps them feel happy and relaxed in the moment.

提案: Your answer expresses your feelings well but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating similar ideas and use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

例: Yes, I love watching funny movies because they bring me happiness and help me relax during stressful times at school. They also boost my confidence.

× Laughter Laughter helps me reduce stress and improve my mood and moreover, laughter can boost the immune system and enhance the overall well-being, making it making an essential part of the healthy lifestyle.

✓ Laughter helps me reduce stress and improve my mood and moreover, laughter can boost the immune system and enhance overall well-being, making it an essential part of a healthy lifestyle.

The phrase 'making it making' contains a repeated present participle 'making' which is incorrect. Also, 'the healthy lifestyle' should be 'a healthy lifestyle' because it refers to a general concept, not a specific one. The correction removes the repeated word and adjusts the article for clarity.

× It was yesterday that my mom that my mom was talking to my grandparents and my grandparents that they shared a really funny story about they walking along the neighborhood and found a cast that was lying on the ground and they picked it up and feed him some food.

✓ It was yesterday that my mom was talking to my grandparents and they shared a really funny story about walking along the neighborhood, finding a cat lying on the ground, and picking it up to feed it some food.

The original sentence has redundancy and incorrect tense usage such as 'feed' instead of 'fed'. Also, 'cast' is likely a typo for 'cat'. The sentence is corrected for clarity, proper past tense usage, and pronoun agreement.

× It was yesterday that my mom that my mom was talking to my grandparents and my grandparents that they shared a really funny story about they walking along the neighborhood and found a cast that was lying on the ground and they picked it up and feed him some food.

✓ It was yesterday that my mom was talking to my grandparents and they shared a really funny story about walking along the neighborhood, finding a cat lying on the ground, and picking it up to feed it some food.

The pronouns 'they' and 'him' are incorrectly used. 'They' should be omitted before 'walking' as it is unnecessary, and 'him' should be 'it' to refer to the cat. Correct pronoun usage improves sentence clarity.

× It was yesterday that my mom that my mom was talking to my grandparents and my grandparents that they shared a really funny story about they walking along the neighborhood and found a cast that was lying on the ground and they picked it up and feed him some food.

✓ It was yesterday that my mom was talking to my grandparents and they shared a really funny story about walking along the neighborhood, finding a cat lying on the ground, and picking it up to feed it some food.

The phrase 'walking along the neighborhood' is better expressed as 'walking along the neighborhood' or 'walking in the neighborhood'. The correction maintains 'along the neighborhood' as acceptable but clarifies the sentence structure for better flow.

× Yes, I do 'cause I love to share my daily interesting stories to my to my friends or other people that I want to make them feel happy and relax at that moment.

✓ Yes, I do because I love to share my daily interesting stories with my friends or other people to make them feel happy and relaxed at that moment.

The phrase 'to my to my friends' is repetitive and incorrect. Also, 'make them feel happy and relax' should be 'make them feel happy and relaxed' to use the correct adjective form. 'Because' is preferred over the informal ''cause' in formal speech.

× Yes, I do 'cause I love to share my daily interesting stories to my to my friends or other people that I want to make them feel happy and relax at that moment.

✓ Yes, I do because I love to share my daily interesting stories with my friends or other people to make them feel happy and relaxed at that moment.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'share'. The correct preposition is 'with' when indicating the people you share stories with.

× Yes I do, I am actually very obsessed with the funny movies 'cause I think the movies brings me happiness and a sense of relaxing in my stressful life or in my school life that the movies reduce my stress and improve my confidence.

✓ Yes, I do. I am actually very obsessed with funny movies because I think the movies bring me happiness and a sense of relaxation in my stressful life or school life. The movies reduce my stress and improve my confidence.

The phrase 'the funny movies' should be 'funny movies' without 'the' as it refers to movies in general. 'Brings' should be 'bring' to agree with plural 'movies'. 'A sense of relaxing' should be 'a sense of relaxation' because 'relaxing' is an adjective/verb form, while 'relaxation' is the noun needed here. The sentence is also split for clarity.