Laughing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and structured by starting with a clear topic sentence, then adding specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it concise within 5 sentences.

例: I think laughter plays an important role in daily life because it helps reduce stress and creates a relaxing atmosphere. Moreover, laughter brings joy to people and serves as a form of entertainment, making social interactions more enjoyable.

提案: Provide a more specific example of when you last laughed and use linking words to connect your ideas clearly. This will make your answer more coherent and engaging.

例: I laugh every day, but the last time I laughed was yesterday at work. Even though some tasks were confusing, I found humor in the situation, which helped me stay positive despite the challenges.

提案: Try to answer directly and clearly, then support your answer with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid vague statements and keep your response concise.

例: Yes, I can make my daughter laugh often, which makes me happy. However, I believe it's difficult to control others' emotions, so I focus on making my daughter feel joyful when we spend time together.

提案: Improve your answer by starting with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't usually watch funny movies because I prefer dramas and science fiction films. However, I enjoyed watching the TV series Friends, which was very entertaining and made me laugh a lot.

× Laughter means less stress and relaxing environment.

✓ Laughter means less stress and a relaxing environment.

The noun 'environment' is singular and requires an article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct in this context.

× Laughter adds joy to the place and it is a sort of entertainment to people.

✓ Laughter adds joy to the place and it is a sort of entertainment for people.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used with 'entertainment'; the correct preposition is 'for' when referring to people receiving entertainment.

× The rest of people, I can't control their feelings or their emotions.

✓ The rest of the people, I can't control their feelings or their emotions.

When referring to a specific group, 'the rest of the people' requires the definite article 'the' before 'people'.

× The only movie or the television series that I saw and it was a fun for me was Friends.

✓ The only movie or television series that I saw and that was fun for me was Friends.

The phrase 'a fun' is incorrect because 'fun' is an uncountable noun here; also, 'and it was' is redundant and should be 'and that was' to connect clauses properly.