Laughing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your opinion and supporting it with a clear reason. Avoid repeating phrases and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

例: I think laughter means happiness in daily life because when people laugh, it spreads joy to others and creates a positive atmosphere.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and has some grammatical errors. Try to give a full, clear response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'.

例: I laughed about 10 minutes ago while watching a comedy TV series. It was very funny and made me feel happy.

提案: Your answer is good but could be clearer and more natural. Try to use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I think I can make others laugh because I often tell jokes at unexpected moments, which surprises them and makes them laugh.

提案: Your answer is clear but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and correct verb tenses. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

例: Absolutely, I enjoy watching funny movies because they make me laugh and help me relax after a busy day, allowing me to feel refreshed.

× I think it may represent that you have a pleasant day and if others saw your others see your love laughing and they will laugh too.

✓ I think it may represent that you have a pleasant day, and if others see your love laughing, they will laugh too.

The sentence contains incorrect pronoun usage and redundancy with 'others saw your others see your love laughing'. The correct form is 'if others see your love laughing' to maintain clarity and proper pronoun reference.

× So it is a good.

✓ So it is good.

The phrase 'a good' is incomplete because 'good' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. Here, 'good' is used as a predicate adjective, so the article 'a' should be removed.

× I watch a series TV.

✓ I watched a TV series.

The phrase 'a series TV' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'a TV series'. Also, since the question asks about the last time, past tense 'watched' is appropriate.

× It's very, uh, serious comedy TV, a comedy TV series which is very funny and.

✓ It's a very serious comedy TV series, which is very funny.

The phrase 'serious comedy TV' is awkward; 'serious comedy TV series' is better. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed proper punctuation and structure.

× Maybe it's umm, 10 minutes ago.

✓ Maybe it was, umm, 10 minutes ago.

The phrase 'it's' (it is) is present tense and incorrect when referring to a past time. The past tense 'it was' should be used.

× I often say some jokes that in their unexpected situation so often make them surprise and laugh.

✓ I often say some jokes in unexpected situations that often surprise them and make them laugh.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and word order. 'Say some jokes that in their unexpected situation' is incorrect; it should be 'say some jokes in unexpected situations'. Also, 'make them surprise' should be 'surprise them'.

× I like watching the funny movie because I think it can make me laugh and unwind me after a busy day and it allowed me to recharge and become more refreshed.

✓ I like watching funny movies because I think they can make me laugh and help me unwind after a busy day, allowing me to recharge and feel more refreshed.

'The funny movie' is incorrect because it refers to movies in general, so plural 'funny movies' is appropriate. Also, 'unwind me' is incorrect; 'help me unwind' is better. The tense 'allowed' should be consistent with present tense, so 'allowing' is used.