Road— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。"tropical jams"はおそらく"traffic jams"の誤りであり、"I want to the local government to change some actions here"は不自然です。より自然で明確な表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。

例: Yes, the roads near my home are very busy, and there are often traffic jams. I think this is especially dangerous for children crossing the street, so I hope the local government will take measures to improve safety.

提案: 回答に文法の誤りや意味が不明瞭な部分があります。"I eat another people for waiting signal"は意味不明で、正しい表現に直す必要があります。また、内容を明確にし、冗長な表現を避けることが重要です。

例: Yes, many people in my neighborhood have to cross the road to reach the nearest station. I think it takes a lot of time because sometimes the traffic signals have long waiting times.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、"uh"などのフィラーが多く、流暢さを妨げています。また、"overcrowded"は道路の状態を表すには不自然で、"congested"や"busy"の方が適切です。より自然で流暢な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I think the roads are often congested, so widening them is essential to reduce traffic jams and improve safety for children and elderly people.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。"too narrow to for the carrier smoothly"は不自然で、"extension and modification is a crucial"も文法的に誤りです。正しい文法と自然な表現を使い、具体的に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I believe the roads are too narrow for smooth traffic flow. Therefore, I think the local government should consider extending and improving the roads.

× Yes, I think so and there are many tropical jams near my home and I find that it is a very dangerous especially for children across the road.

✓ Yes, I think so and there are many traffic jams near my home and I find that it is very dangerous especially for children crossing the road.

The word 'tropical jams' is incorrect; the correct term is 'traffic jams'. Also, 'a very dangerous' is incorrect because 'dangerous' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify or should be used without 'a'. 'Crossing' is the correct form to describe children moving across the road.

× So I want to the local government to change some actions here.

✓ So I want the local government to take some actions here.

The phrase 'want to the local government' is incorrect; 'want' should be followed directly by the object without 'to'. Also, 'change some actions' is unnatural; 'take some actions' is the correct collocation.

× I think it's a very time consuming.

✓ I think it's very time-consuming.

'Time-consuming' is a compound adjective and should be hyphenated. Also, 'a very time consuming' is incorrect because 'time-consuming' is an adjective and does not need an article here.

× Sometimes I eat another people for waiting signal for a long time.

✓ Sometimes I see other people waiting at the signal for a long time.

'Eat another people' is incorrect and nonsensical. The intended meaning is likely 'see other people'. Also, 'for waiting signal' is incorrect; it should be 'waiting at the signal'.

× Uh, I think the road is a very, uh, overcrowded, uh, so I think that, uh, widening of the road is essential to prevent the traffic jam and, uh, enhance the safety of our children and elderly people.

✓ Uh, I think the road is very overcrowded, so I think that widening the road is essential to prevent traffic jams and enhance the safety of our children and elderly people.

'A very overcrowded' is incorrect because 'overcrowded' is an adjective and does not need an article 'a'. Also, 'the traffic jam' should be plural 'traffic jams' to refer generally. 'Widening of the road' can be simplified to 'widening the road'.

× Right now the road is too narrow to for the carrier smoothly.

✓ Right now the road is too narrow for traffic to move smoothly.

'To for the carrier smoothly' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely that the road is too narrow for vehicles or traffic to move smoothly.

× Also I think the some extension and modification is a crucial for the local government to decide.

✓ Also I think some extension and modification are crucial for the local government to decide.

'The some extension' is incorrect; 'some' should not be preceded by 'the'. Also, 'is a crucial' is incorrect because 'extension and modification' are plural, so the verb should be 'are' and 'crucial' without 'a'.