Road— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「traffic congestions」は不可算名詞のため単数形の「traffic congestion」が適切です。また、「wider rules」は意味が不明瞭で、「wider roads」や「better traffic regulations」など具体的な表現にすると良いでしょう。さらに、文を簡潔にし、5文以内にまとめることを意識してください。

例: Yes, the roads near my home are often very busy, especially during rush hours. I think the local government should widen the roads to reduce traffic congestion. This would make commuting easier for everyone.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「reach nearest station」では冠詞が抜けているため「reach the nearest station」が正しいです。また、「It seems that there are two or three roads」は具体性に欠けるため、より明確に説明すると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、流れを良くすることもおすすめします。

例: Yes, many people, including elderly and children, cross the roads to get to the nearest station. However, there are several busy roads, which makes crossing difficult and sometimes unsafe for them.

提案: 文法的に不自然な部分が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「there was near my house is very heavy」は意味不明で、「the traffic near my house is very heavy」が適切です。また、「some improvements require」も不自然で、「some improvements are required」や「the roads need improvement」が良い表現です。文を簡潔にし、明確に答えることを心がけてください。

例: The traffic near my house is very heavy, especially during rush hours. It is difficult for elderly people to cross the roads safely in the morning, so I believe some improvements are necessary.

提案: 回答は質問に答えていますが、表現が不自然で意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「The roads are much safer down right now」は意味不明で、「The roads are not very safe right now」が適切です。また、「some bridges are necessary for walking across」は良い表現ですが、もう少し具体的に説明すると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、論理的に話すことを意識してください。

例: Yes, I think the roads need improvement. For example, building pedestrian bridges would help young children and elderly people cross safely, as the roads are not very safe at the moment.

× Yes, there are many traffic congestions near my home so I always ask the local government to improve it.

✓ Yes, there is much traffic congestion near my home, so I always ask the local government to improve it.

'Traffic congestion' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'congestions'. Also, 'much' is used with uncountable nouns instead of 'many'.

× We need some much wider rules down at the present.

✓ We need much wider roads at present.

The phrase 'some much wider rules' is incorrect. 'Rules' should be 'roads' to fit context, and 'some much' is redundant; 'much wider' suffices. Also, 'down at the present' is incorrect; 'at present' is the correct phrase.

× ...many elderly people and young children have to cross the road to reach nearest station.

✓ ...many elderly people and young children have to cross the road to reach the nearest station.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'nearest station' to specify a particular station.

× It seems that there are two or three roads and it is difficult for many people to cross.

✓ It seems that there are two or three roads, and it is difficult for many people to cross them.

The pronoun 'them' is needed to refer back to 'roads' to avoid ambiguity and complete the sentence properly.

× I think that there was near my house is very heavy, especially in rush hours.

✓ I think that the traffic near my house is very heavy, especially during rush hours.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. 'There was near my house' lacks a subject. Adding 'the traffic' clarifies the subject, and 'during rush hours' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× ...so it seems that some improvements require.

✓ ...so it seems that some improvements are required.

The verb 'require' needs to be in passive form 'are required' to correctly express necessity.

× Yes, it seems that some bridges are necessary for walking across.

✓ Yes, it seems that some bridges are necessary to walk across.

The phrase 'necessary for walking across' is awkward; 'necessary to walk across' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× The roads are much safer down right now.

✓ The roads are much safer now.

The phrase 'down right now' is incorrect and unnecessary. 'Now' alone suffices to indicate the current time.

× It seems that it's hard for young children and elderly people to cross it.

✓ It seems that it's hard for young children and elderly people to cross the road.

The pronoun 'it' is vague here; specifying 'the road' clarifies the meaning.