Road— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'um'. Use correct grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then provide a reason or example.

例: Yes, the roads in my area are very busy because London is a large city with many people and vehicles, which often causes traffic jams.

提案: Focus on using correct verb forms and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, explain why people might not obey signals with more specific reasons.

例: Yes, many people cross the roads when commuting to work or university. However, some do not obey traffic signals because they find waiting times too long and inefficient.

提案: Avoid using unclear or incorrect words like 'fizzy'. Provide a clear description of the road conditions. Keep your answer complete and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to explain the impact of road conditions.

例: The roads in London are often congested, especially during peak hours, which makes many people hesitate to travel early to work or university.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and grammar, for example, 'roads' instead of 'rows'. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I believe investing in infrastructure like roads and traffic signals is essential because many pedestrians feel unsafe when crossing the streets.

× Yes, I think a traffic jam, uh, baby, uh, but uh, in my home, uh, because I live in London and uh, and this city is a well known for many people that, uh, there are crowded people and the cars.

✓ Yes, I think there is a traffic jam, uh, maybe, uh, but uh, in my home, uh, because I live in London and uh, this city is well known for having many people, uh, there are crowded people and cars.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'a traffic jam' without a verb and misuses 'baby' instead of 'maybe'. Also, 'this city is a well known' should be 'this city is well known' without the article 'a'. The phrase 'there are crowded people and the cars' is awkward; it should be 'there are crowded people and cars'. The singular/plural agreement and article usage needed correction.

× Yes, so many people have to across the road when they are commuting to workplace and universities, but many people don't obey their signal because it is inefficient.

✓ Yes, so many people have to cross the road when they are commuting to workplaces and universities, but many people don't obey the signals because they are inefficient.

The phrase 'have to across' is incorrect; the verb 'cross' should be in base form after 'have to'. Also, 'workplace' should be plural 'workplaces' to match 'universities'. 'Their signal' is vague; 'the signals' is more appropriate. The plural forms and verb usage needed correction.

× It seems that the traffic jam are very fizzy in London and so many people hesitate to, uh, go to universities or work at early times. And I think, uh.

✓ It seems that the traffic jams are very busy in London and so many people hesitate to, uh, go to universities or work early. And I think, uh.

'Traffic jam' is singular but used with 'are', so it should be plural 'traffic jams'. The adjective 'fizzy' is incorrect in this context; 'busy' is appropriate. 'Work at early times' is awkward; 'work early' is better. The plural agreement and word choice needed correction.

× Yes, I think the investment of infrastructure such as rows and signals is essential in my hometown and that is because it seems that the pedestrians are feel scared when crossing the road.

✓ Yes, I think the investment in infrastructure such as roads and signals is essential in my hometown because it seems that pedestrians feel scared when crossing the road.

The phrase 'investment of infrastructure' should be 'investment in infrastructure'. 'Rows' is a misspelling of 'roads'. 'The pedestrians are feel scared' is incorrect; it should be 'pedestrians feel scared'. The definite article 'the' before 'pedestrians' is unnecessary here. Preposition use, spelling, and verb form needed correction.