Road— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating words (e.g., “living area”) and fix sentence fragments.

例: Not really. I live in a residential area with many apartment buildings, so traffic is usually light. However, the road I take to the office is quite busy during rush hour.

提案: Remove hesitation sounds and use linking words to connect ideas. Give one clear main point and one specific comparison with a linking word such as “however” or “in contrast.”

例: Yes. People here usually obey the traffic lights when crossing the road; however, I observed that in some European cities pedestrians sometimes ignore signals and cross more freely.

提案: Avoid filler phrases and ensure grammatical accuracy. Give a clear topic sentence and two specific details (locations, causes, examples). Finish your sentence—don’t leave fragments.

例: The roads in my city are in poor condition. In the southern area, especially in Chiayi City, many streets are uneven and full of potholes because infrastructure investment has been limited.

提案: Be direct and give specific suggestions for improvement. Use linking words to explain reasons and avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide one concise recommendation and one reason or example.

例: Yes, definitely. The local government should resurface roads and fill potholes regularly because current annual repairs are superficial and the problems quickly reappear.

× Not really because I'm living in a living area so there are a lot of apartments but there are not really a bunch of cars on the road.

✓ Not really because I live in a residential area, so there are a lot of apartments, but there are not many cars on the road.

The progressive form 'I'm living' is incorrect for a general habitual state; use simple present 'I live'. 'living area' is awkward; 'residential area' is more natural. 'a bunch of cars' is informal and 'not really a bunch' is awkward; use 'not many cars'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use simple present for states and more precise vocabulary.'

× But on my way to my office. It's quite busy though.

✓ But on my way to my office, it is quite busy though.

The first fragment 'But on my way to my office.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb; connect it to the next sentence with a comma or rewrite as a complete sentence: 'However, my way to the office is quite busy.' Ensure sentences are complete.'

× Yes, but actually they follow the, umm, the lights, the traffic light when crossing the road.

✓ Yes, but actually they follow the traffic lights when crossing the road.

Repeated use of the definite article 'the' is unnecessary. 'Traffic lights' is plural and more natural. Remove filler words and redundant articles for clarity.'

× But umm, I noticed that in some European country people don't really follow the traffic lights while they're crossing the road.

✓ But I noticed that in some European countries people don't really follow the traffic lights when they cross the road.

Use plural 'countries' if referring to multiple countries. Use simple present 'people don't really follow' for habitual action. 'While they're crossing' is acceptable but 'when they cross' is clearer. Remove filler 'umm'.'

× Oh wow, that's a very interesting question, 'cause everyone living in Taiwan knows that the road in Taiwan is pretty awful and it's pretty bumpy.

✓ Oh wow, that's a very interesting question, because everyone living in Taiwan knows that the roads in Taiwan are pretty awful and quite bumpy.

Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause'. 'road' should be plural 'roads' when speaking generally about the country's roads. 'It's pretty bumpy' should refer to 'roads' so plural agreement needed. 'Quite bumpy' is stylistically better.'

× So especially in China City, because in the southern part of Taiwan the infrastructure is quite undeveloped.

✓ So especially in Chiayi City, because in the southern part of Taiwan the infrastructure is quite undeveloped.

Proper noun correction: likely 'Chiayi City' (or the intended city) rather than 'China City'. Ensure correct place names. No major grammatical error but proper nouns require accuracy.'

× So it's totally bumpy and.

✓ So the roads are totally bumpy.

The original is an incomplete sentence ending with 'and.' Replace with a complete sentence referring back to 'roads'. Avoid sentence fragments.'

× So as I mentioned before, the the answer is absolutely because they have to, I think they have to repair this kind of pinhole and the bumpy surface.

✓ So as I mentioned before, the answer is absolutely yes, because I think they have to repair potholes and the bumpy road surface.

Fix repetition 'the the'. Add 'yes' to complete 'the answer is absolutely'. 'Pinhole' is incorrect—use 'potholes'. 'Repair this kind of pinhole and the bumpy surface' is awkward; use 'repair potholes and the bumpy road surface.' Ensure clear noun choices and sentence flow.'

× And sometimes they, I would say they annually, umm, repair the road, but it doesn't work.

✓ And sometimes, I would say they repair the road annually, but it doesn't work.

Word order was awkward ('they, I would say they annually'). Place adverb 'annually' after the verb or at sentence end. Remove filler 'umm' and extra pronoun. Use simple present 'repair' for habitual action. Clarify meaning: perhaps 'their repairs do not last' if intended.'