Road— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and add one specific detail (time or example). Use a linking phrase for clarity.

例: Yes. I live near several large avenues in Madrid, so the roads are usually quite busy, especially during the morning rush hour when cars, buses and bikes converge toward the centre.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and finish your thought. Use linking words (for example, also) and one specific example of where or when tunnels/bridges are used.

例: Yes. People usually cross at marked crosswalks and wait for the green light; additionally, in very busy areas such as near Atocha station there are pedestrian bridges and underpasses to keep people safe and reduce congestion.

提案: Start with a clear overall judgement, then add a specific supporting detail and a linking word like 'however' or 'for example'. Correct small grammar (singular/plural) and use a real or clearly plausible road name.

例: Overall, the roads in Madrid are generally in good condition, particularly on major central avenues such as Gran Vía. However, there is frequent construction around the outskirts as the city upgrades infrastructure to cope with traffic growth.

提案: Provide one or two specific, concrete improvements and explain why they would help. Reduce hesitations and use linking words like 'for example' and 'therefore'.

例: Yes. I think better traffic management would help — for example, adjusting signal timings during peak hours to reduce jams — and more dedicated pedestrian zones and clearer crossings would make walking safer for residents.

× my house is surrounded by big avenues, uh, so there are always uh, cars, buses, bikes, pedestrian umm.

✓ My house is surrounded by large avenues, so there are always cars, buses, bikes, and pedestrians.

'Big' is not wrong but 'large' is more natural for 'avenues'; more importantly, 'pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians' to match the list of countable nouns. Lists of countable items require plural forms or quantifiers. Also add 'and' before the final item for correct listing.

× The roads are especially umm, congested and with traffic in the mornings.

✓ The roads are especially congested with traffic in the mornings.

The phrase 'congested and with traffic' is ungrammatical: 'congested' already implies heavy traffic. Combine into 'congested with traffic' or just 'congested'. Remove extra 'and' to form a correct adjective + prepositional phrase.

× we usually use or cross the road through crosswalks or wait for the green lines light appear to cross safely.

✓ We usually cross the road at crosswalks or wait for the green light to appear to cross safely.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'crosswalks' not 'through'. 'Green lines light' is incorrect: it should be 'green light'. Also word order: 'wait for the green light to appear' is the correct infinitive structure. Remove redundant 'use or'.

× There is also some pedestrian tunnels or bridges especially in the busy streets to avoid heavy heavy traffic and reduce the.

✓ There are also some pedestrian tunnels and bridges, especially on busy streets, to avoid heavy traffic and reduce congestion.

'There is' should be 'There are' because 'tunnels and bridges' is plural (singular/plural error). 'Pedestrian tunnels' is plural so 'some' is acceptable but must match plural verb. Use 'on busy streets' rather than 'in the busy streets'. End the sentence with a clear noun 'congestion' rather than leaving it incomplete. Also remove duplicate 'heavy'.

× Overall, the road in Madrid are pretty good, especially in the center of the city on the biggest main roads like Emmetrinta.

✓ Overall, the roads in Madrid are pretty good, especially in the center of the city on the largest main roads like Emmetrinta.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the road ... are' is incorrect because 'road' is singular but 'are' is plural. Use plural 'roads' to match 'are'. Also 'biggest main roads' is awkward; use 'largest main roads' or simply 'main roads'.

× However, because it's a large city, there is always some construction going on improving the infrastructure.

✓ However, because it's a large city, there is always some construction going on to improve the infrastructure.

Use infinitive 'to improve' after 'going on' to indicate purpose. 'Improving' could work but requires rephrasing ('construction going on, improving the infrastructure' is a participle clause and is not wrong but 'to improve' is clearer and more idiomatic here.)

× In large cities like Madrid there is always something to improve umm in traffic, uh maintenance.

✓ In large cities like Madrid there is always something to improve in traffic and maintenance.

Remove filler words and use parallel nouns joined by 'and'. 'Something to improve in traffic, maintenance' needs 'and' to connect the two areas. The structure 'something to improve in' correctly sets the context.

× For example, trying to avoid traffic jam in especially rough hours or create safer uh roads for pedestrian.

✓ For example, trying to avoid traffic jams, especially during peak hours, or creating safer roads for pedestrians.

Use plural 'traffic jams' for countable events and 'during peak hours' is the correct prepositional phrase rather than 'in especially rough hours'. Maintain parallel gerund forms after 'trying' ('trying... or creating...'). 'Pedestrian' should be plural 'pedestrians'.