Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议使用更自然的英语表达，并且避免重复和无意义的词汇。回答时应直接回应问题，并用连贯的句子表达观点。

例: No, I don't like wearing perfume because I prefer not to have strong scents on my body. Also, I think many men feel the same way and usually don't use perfume.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连接词使句子更流畅。避免使用不正确的词汇，如“floor fragrance”。

例: No, I don't use perfume in my daily life because I find strong scents overpowering and uncomfortable. I prefer to stay natural without any fragrance.

提案: 回答较为完整，但有语法错误和表达不够自然。建议注意时态和冠词的使用，并使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift even though I don't like it myself. For example, I once bought a bottle of perfume for my girlfriend's birthday, and she really liked it because she thought it was a meaningful and thoughtful present.

提案: 回答不连贯且有语法错误，建议用完整句子表达观点，避免断句和不相关的词汇。可以直接表达自己的看法并给出理由。

例: Actually, I don't know much about perfumes, but the one I bought for my girlfriend's birthday was not very expensive. So, I think perfumes can be affordable.

× No, I don't like wearing perfume becaused I don't want to have some strong sense that on my body.

✓ No, I don't like wearing perfume because I don't want to have a strong scent on my body.

The word 'becaused' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'sense' should be 'scent' to correctly refer to smell. 'Some strong sense that on my body' is awkward; 'a strong scent on my body' is correct.

× Whatever it pleasured.

✓ Whatever pleases me.

'Whatever it pleasured' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correct phrase is 'Whatever pleases me' to express preference.

× Aurum pleasured.

✓ I am pleased by Aurum.

The phrase 'Aurum pleasured' is incorrect; 'pleasured' is not used this way. The correct expression is 'I am pleased by Aurum' or 'I like Aurum'.

× As a man, I think most of men or boy.

✓ As a man, I think most men or boys.

'Most of men or boy' is incorrect; it should be 'most men or boys' to correctly use plural forms.

× Preferred tool.

✓ Prefer not to use perfume.

'Preferred tool' is unclear and incorrect. The intended meaning is 'prefer not to use perfume'.

× No, I never use perfume in my dating life becaused I dislike having strong sensors on my body.

✓ No, I never use perfume in my daily life because I dislike having strong scents on my body.

'Becaused' is incorrect; should be 'because'. 'Strong sensors' is incorrect; should be 'strong scents'. 'Dating life' is likely a mistake for 'daily life'.

× Whatever it smells good or bad and I find that floor fragrance. Are. Overpowering and uncomfortable.

✓ Whether it smells good or bad, I find that floral fragrances are overpowering and uncomfortable.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct structure is needed: 'Whether it smells good or bad, I find that floral fragrances are overpowering and uncomfortable.'

× I prefer to a wide.

✓ I prefer to avoid it.

'I prefer to a wide' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended is 'I prefer to avoid it'.

× Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift even through I don't like very it myself.

✓ Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift even though I don't like it very much myself.

'Even through' should be 'even though'. 'Don't like very it' is incorrect; correct is 'don't like it very much'.

× For example, I once bought a bottle of perfume for my girlfriends as her birthday gift.

✓ For example, I once bought a bottle of perfume for my girlfriend as her birthday gift.

'Girlfriends' is plural but 'her' is singular; should be 'girlfriend' to match singular pronoun.

× And she really liked it because she thought it's a meaningful and thoughtful gift.

✓ And she really liked it because she thought it was a meaningful and thoughtful gift.

'It's' (it is) should be past tense 'it was' to match past context.

× Well, actually I don't know much about perfume, but as I slide once I bought a bottle of perfume for my girlfriend's birthday gift.

✓ Well, actually I don't know much about perfume, but once I bought a bottle of perfume for my girlfriend's birthday gift.

'As I slide once' is incorrect; likely intended 'once' alone.

× At that. And that perfume was not too expensive, so I think. No.

✓ At that time, that perfume was not too expensive, so I think not.

Fragmented sentences; should be combined and clarified as 'At that time, that perfume was not too expensive, so I think not.'