Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够连贯，语法和表达有错误，建议用简单清晰的句子直接表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, I don't like wearing perfume because I find strong smells unpleasant. I prefer to stay close to nature and avoid artificial scents.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不自然，建议使用正确的时态和连词，表达更完整的理由。

例: No, I don't use perfume daily because I find the fragrance uncomfortable and overpowering. Moreover, I prefer natural scents and think perfume is more popular among women than men.

提案: 回答有重复和语法错误，建议用连贯的句子表达经历和感受，避免断句。

例: Yes, definitely. I once bought a bottle of perfume as a birthday gift for my girlfriend, and she really liked it. It was a meaningful and thoughtful present.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: No, I don't think perfumes are expensive. I once bought a reasonably priced perfume, so in my opinion, most people can afford them.

× No, I don't like wearing perfume becauses.

✓ No, I don't like wearing perfume because.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'because'. This is a common spelling error and should be corrected to maintain proper sentence structure.

× Strong says it on my body, whatever it smells.

✓ Strong scent stays on my body, no matter how it smells.

The original sentence uses incorrect words and structure. 'Strong says' should be 'Strong scent stays', and 'whatever it smells' should be 'no matter how it smells' to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× Pleasure, unpleasure.

✓ It can be pleasant or unpleasant.

The original phrase is incomplete and unclear. A complete sentence with subject and verb is needed to express the idea properly.

× And why they're having a noticeable smile.

✓ And that's why they have a noticeable smile.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. The corrected sentence uses proper subject-verb agreement and clarifies the meaning.

× No, I never used perfume in my daily life because I find that fragrence are uncomfortable and the overpowering.

✓ No, I have never used perfume in my daily life because I find that fragrance is uncomfortable and overpowering.

The past tense 'used' should be present perfect 'have never used' to indicate experience up to now. 'Fragrence' is misspelled and should be 'fragrance'. 'Are' should be 'is' because 'fragrance' is singular. 'The overpowering' is incorrect; 'overpowering' as an adjective does not need 'the'.

× I prefer to stay nature and avoid using any artificial smells.

✓ I prefer to stay in nature and avoid using any artificial smells.

The phrase 'stay nature' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stay in nature' using the preposition 'in'.

× Besides that I think.

✓ Besides that, I think perfume is more popular among women than men.

The original sentence is incomplete. It needs to be combined with the following sentence to form a complete thought.

× Perfume is more popular among women than men.

✓ Perfume is more popular among women than among men.

To compare two groups properly, 'among' should be used before both 'women' and 'men' for clarity.

× Yes, definitely. I would like to buy perfume. As a gift.

✓ Yes, definitely. I would like to buy perfume as a gift.

The phrase 'As a gift.' is a sentence fragment and should be combined with the previous sentence for correct structure.

× To be honest, I I once bought a bottle of perfume as a birthday gift to my girlfriend.

✓ To be honest, I once bought a bottle of perfume as a birthday gift for my girlfriend.

The phrase 'gift to my girlfriend' should be 'gift for my girlfriend' to use the correct preposition. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typo and should be corrected.

× And she was very like he liked it.

✓ And she really liked it.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. The corrected sentence uses proper pronouns and verb forms to express the intended meaning.

× And she started at a meaningful and thoughtful present.

✓ And she said it was a meaningful and thoughtful present.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the intended meaning with proper verb usage.

× No, I don't think so. I think the price of perfume are it's a forwardable I once bought or perfume that not too expensive and.

✓ No, I don't think so. I think the price of perfume is affordable. I once bought a perfume that was not too expensive and reasonably priced.

'Price' is singular, so 'are' should be 'is'. 'Forwardable' is incorrect; the correct word is 'affordable'. The sentence is fragmented and needs to be restructured for clarity.

× Reasonable priced. So you my opinion, the price of perfume can be accepted by most of people.

✓ It was reasonably priced. So, in my opinion, the price of perfume can be accepted by most people.

'Reasonable priced' should be 'reasonably priced' (adverb + past participle). 'So you my opinion' is incorrect; it should be 'So, in my opinion'. 'Most of people' should be 'most people'.