Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、"natural scent"の説明をもう少し具体的にし、"too strong"の理由を詳しく述べるとより効果的です。例えば、どのような香りが好みかや、強い香りがどのように感じるかを加えると良いでしょう。

例: No, I don't like wearing perfume because I prefer the natural scent of my skin. I find that strong perfumes can be overwhelming and sometimes give me discomfort.

提案: 回答は明確で理由も述べられていますが、"too strong"や"headaches"の具体的な状況や感覚を詳しく説明すると、より説得力が増します。また、"daily lives"は単数形の"daily life"が適切です。

例: No, I don't wear perfume in my daily life because strong scents often trigger headaches for me, especially when I'm in a small room or crowded place.

提案: 文法の誤り（"avoid send"→"avoid sending"、"it's very depends"→"it very much depends"）を直し、"people's preference"の所有格も正しく使いましょう。また、なぜ花を贈るのが良いか理由を加えると良いです。

例: No, I tend to avoid sending perfumes as gifts because it very much depends on people's preferences. Instead, I prefer to send flowers because they are universally appreciated.

提案: 文法の誤り（"it's very depends"→"it very much depends"、"costs"→"cost"）を修正し、"high end brands"は"high-end brands"とハイフンを入れましょう。さらに、具体的な価格帯や例を加えると内容が豊かになります。

例: I would say it very much depends. Generally, high-end brands can be very expensive, costing a lot of money. However, there are also affordable brands available, so people can choose according to their budget.

× No, wearing a perfume is not my thing because I prefer natural scent and I find that perfumes are too strong for me.

✓ No, wearing perfume is not my thing because I prefer natural scent and I find that perfumes are too strong for me.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'perfume' when referring to it in a general sense. 'Perfume' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a' should be omitted.

× No, I don't wear perfumes in my daily lives because I find them too strong for me.

✓ No, I don't wear perfume in my daily life because I find it too strong for me.

'Perfumes' should be singular 'perfume' as it refers to the general concept. Also, 'daily lives' is incorrect; the singular 'daily life' is appropriate here. 'Them' should be 'it' to match the singular noun.

× No, I tend to avoid send perfumes as a gift because it's very depends on peoples preference.

✓ No, I tend to avoid sending perfumes as a gift because it very much depends on people's preferences.

After 'avoid', the verb should be in the '-ing' form ('sending'). 'It's very depends' is incorrect; it should be 'it very much depends'. Also, 'peoples preference' should be 'people's preferences' to show possession and plural form.

× Instead I I prefer to send flowers as a gift.

✓ Instead, I prefer to send flowers as a gift.

There is a repeated word 'I I' which is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'I'.

× I would say it's very depends.

✓ I would say it very much depends.

The phrase 'it's very depends' is incorrect. 'Depends' is a verb and should not be used with 'it's'. The correct expression is 'it very much depends'.

× In general, those of high end brands costs an arm and a leg.

✓ In general, those high-end brands cost an arm and a leg.

'Those of high end brands' is awkward; 'those high-end brands' is better. 'Costs' should be 'cost' to agree with the plural subject 'brands'.