Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中有较多重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且注意语法的正确性。可以尝试用更自然的表达方式说明你不喜欢香水的原因。

例: No, I don't like perfume because its strong smell makes me cough. I am sensitive to strong scents, so I usually avoid using it.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清楚的地方，建议简化句子，避免重复，并且用连词使句子更连贯。可以明确说明平时不使用香水的原因和在特殊场合使用的情况。

例: No, I don't use perfume daily because I find the smell too strong. However, I wear it on special occasions to look more elegant.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，句子不连贯。建议用完整的句子表达观点，避免口语化和重复，使用连词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for girls because they usually like it. Perfume is a popular and suitable present that is not too expensive.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议用更准确的句子表达观点，说明不同品牌的香水价格差异，并避免模糊的表达。

例: It depends on the brand. Some perfumes can cost over 2000 dollars, while others made by smaller companies are much cheaper.

× Personally, no. I. I don't like perfume too.

✓ Personally, no. I don't like perfume either.

句子结构不完整且重复，'too'用法不当，应使用'either'来表达否定的附加。建议避免重复，保持句子简洁。

× I don't like perfume very much because of the sense will make me cough because I'm I got added to the, you know, strong smell.

✓ I don't like perfume very much because the scent makes me cough as I am allergic to strong smells.

句子结构混乱，连接词使用不当，且表达不清晰。应使用合适的连接词和表达方式，使句子通顺且意义明确。

× Like I say just now I have an an LG 2 perfume to the strong smell.

✓ As I said just now, I am allergic to strong smells.

句子中出现重复词且表达不清晰，'LG 2 perfume'无意义，应直接表达对强烈气味的过敏。建议简化表达，避免无意义词汇。

× So usually I don't use perfume but in some important event I will use it to make it fancier.

✓ So usually I don't use perfume, but in some important events I will use it to make myself smell nicer.

'in some important event'应为复数形式'events'，且表达不准确，'make it fancier'不合适，应改为使自己闻起来更好。建议注意名词单复数和表达准确性。

× Yes, of course, especially on. When I buy gift for girls.

✓ Yes, of course, especially when I buy gifts for girls.

'especially on.'不完整且错误，'buy gift'应为'buy gifts'，且句子应连贯。建议注意介词和名词复数形式的正确使用。

× You know, girls always on crazy about what kind of perfumes, so it's a good gift and it's not too cheap.

✓ You know, girls are always crazy about different kinds of perfumes, so it's a good gift and it's not too cheap.

'always on crazy'表达错误，应为'are always crazy'，且'what kind of perfumes'应改为'different kinds of perfumes'。建议注意动词形式和名词搭配。

× So it's actually or facial get to say.

✓ So it's actually a good gift to give.

句子结构混乱，词语错误，无法理解原意。应简化表达，使用正确的词汇和结构。建议多练习句子结构和词汇搭配。

× It depends on what the brand is.

✓ It depends on the brand.

'depends on what the brand is'表达冗余，简化为'depends on the brand'更自然。建议简化表达，避免冗余。

× Like for example I have seen some perfumes an spread press, the price of perfume reach over 2000s but also some perfume made by people.

✓ For example, I have seen some perfumes in the press where the price of perfume reaches over 2000, but there are also some perfumes made by people.

句子结构混乱，词语错误，缺少连词和介词，表达不完整。建议注意句子完整性和词汇准确性。