Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达观点。

例: Yes, I like perfume because it is an important part of makeup and helps me feel more confident. I usually wear light fragrances since I don't like strong smells.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议使用简单明了的句子直接回答问题，并用连词连接支持细节。

例: Yes, I use perfume every day because it helps me feel well-prepared and polite. Moreover, I believe it makes me more charming.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但存在拼写错误和表达不够自然的问题，建议注意单词拼写并丰富细节。

例: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift because it is suitable for special occasions like birthdays or weddings.

提案: 回答中信息表达混乱且有语法错误，建议使用完整句子清楚表达价格和质量的关系，并避免无关词汇。

例: Yes, perfumes can be expensive, often costing over 500 for 300 ml. However, they are usually of very good quality, so I think they are worth the price.

× Yes I like perfume's saying perfume is part of the make up and it can help me to become more confident and I usually will light perfume because I don't like too strong.

✓ Yes, I like perfume. I think perfume is part of makeup and it can help me become more confident. I usually wear perfume because I don't like it to be too strong.

这里错误地使用了所有格“perfume's”，应改为句号分开句子。'make up'应写为'makeup'，且不需要冠词'the'。'light perfume'用法不当，应改为'wear perfume'。'too strong'前应加'it to be'使句子完整。

× I usually will light perfume because I don't like too strong.

✓ I usually wear perfume because I don't like it to be too strong.

动词'light'用错，应该用'wear'来表达“使用香水”。'too strong'前缺少主语和动词，应补充为'it to be too strong'。

× Yes, I apply perfume everyday because I think it is important to me too well prepared and to be polite.

✓ Yes, I apply perfume every day because I think it is important for me to be well prepared and polite.

'everyday'是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应用副词短语'every day'表示“每天”。'important to me too well prepared'结构错误，应改为'important for me to be well prepared'。

× I believe perfume cout make me more charming so I will perfume everyday.

✓ I believe perfume can make me more charming, so I will wear perfume every day.

'cout'是拼写错误，应为'can'。'will perfume'用法错误，应为'will wear perfume'。'everyday'应改为'every day'。

× I think perfume is a really good gaved for people, especially on special occasions, for example someone's birthday or someone's wedding.

✓ I think perfume is a really good gift for people, especially on special occasions, for example, someone's birthday or wedding.

'gaved'拼写错误，应为'gift'。'someone's wedding'前不需要重复'someone's'，可简化为'wedding'。

× Yes, I think perfume is kind of expensive because usually the price is over. 500 for 300 meters, but it is also a very good quality.

✓ Yes, I think perfume is kind of expensive because usually the price is over 500 for 300 milliliters, but it is also of very good quality.

'over. 500'中句号错误，应连写为'over 500'。'meters'应为'milliliters'，表示容量单位。'a very good quality'应改为'of very good quality'。