Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp lại hoặc nói lan man, đồng thời sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp.

例: Yes, I like perfume because it helps me feel fresh and confident when I go out.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh các câu không hoàn chỉnh. Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp lý do cụ thể cho việc sử dụng nước hoa sẽ giúp câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I usually use perfume after taking a shower or before going to the gym because it makes me feel comfortable and confident.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về việc tặng nước hoa làm quà.

例: Sometimes, I buy perfume as a gift for my father on his birthday. I have also given perfume to my boyfriend and mother because I think everyone likes it.

提案: Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng chính xác hơn. Trình bày ý kiến rõ ràng và giải thích lý do cụ thể sẽ giúp câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: No, I don't think perfumes are expensive because they are useful and make me feel confident. For example, I think 5 million Vietnam Dong for a bottle is reasonable.

× Yes, and the people who like the figurines.

✓ Yes, and I am one of the people who like perfume.

The original sentence uses 'the people who like the figurines' which is unclear and incorrect in context. The student likely meant to say they are among the people who like perfume. The pronoun usage is incorrect and the sentence is incomplete.

× I use perfume.

✓ I use perfume.

This sentence is correct as it is a simple present tense statement indicating a habitual action.

× Every day when I had plans to go out because I won't my cell have a. Bad smell.

✓ Every day when I have plans to go out because I don't want my body to have a bad smell.

The original sentence incorrectly uses past tense 'had' instead of present tense 'have' to indicate habitual future plans. Also, 'won't' is incorrect here; it should be 'don't want'. The phrase 'my cell have a bad smell' is incorrect; it should be 'my body to have a bad smell' or 'myself to have a bad smell'.

× because I won't my cell have a. Bad smell.

✓ because I don't want my body to have a bad smell.

'Won't' is a contraction of 'will not' and is incorrectly used here. The correct modal verb phrase is 'don't want' to express desire or preference.

× I often use perfume when I need to go out after I have a shower.

✓ I often use perfume when I need to go out after I have taken a shower.

The phrase 'after I have a shower' is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'after I have taken a shower' to indicate completion of the action.

× Go to gym because when I. Half of our wins I will feel more come. Comfortable and confident.

✓ I go to the gym because when I sweat, I feel more comfortable and confident.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'Half of our wins' and 'more come'. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× I don't. I didn't lie. I didn't want myself have.

✓ I don't lie. I don't want to have bad smell myself.

The original sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly and is fragmented. The corrected sentence uses present tense consistently and clarifies the meaning.

× Sometime I purchased a perfume.

✓ Sometimes I purchase perfume.

The adverb 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, 'purchased' is past tense; 'purchase' is better here to indicate habitual action.

× As a gift for my father is his last year in her in his birthday Ann I also buy perfume for my.

✓ As a gift for my father on his last birthday, and I also buy perfume for my...

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect prepositions and unclear phrases. 'In her in his birthday Ann' is incorrect; it should be 'on his last birthday'.

× Boyfriend in my mother because I think everyone will everyone look.

✓ boyfriend and my mother because I think everyone will like it.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. The corrected sentence completes the thought and corrects sentence structure.

× No, in my opinion perfume is not a expensive thing because it's very useful.

✓ No, in my opinion perfume is not an expensive thing because it's very useful.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'expensive'.

× I can use everyday is can bring me a confident man confortable.

✓ I can use it every day; it can bring me confidence and comfort.

The original sentence has incorrect verb forms and word choices. 'Confident man confortable' is incorrect; it should be 'confidence and comfort'.

× So I think around 5 million Vietnam Dong for one perform is not expensive.

✓ So I think around 5 million Vietnam Dong for one perfume is not expensive.

The word 'perform' is a typo and should be 'perfume'. Also, the quantifier 'one' is correct here.