Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强句子结构的准确性和连贯性，避免断句和拼写错误。可以尝试用更自然的表达方式描述喜欢香水的原因。

例: Yes, I like perfume and enjoy collecting different scents. Each fragrance has a unique smell that makes me feel relaxed and calm. Collecting perfumes has become a therapeutic hobby for me.

提案: 回答较为完整，但存在少量语法错误，如主谓一致问题。建议注意动词形式和冠词的使用，使表达更准确自然。

例: I use perfume almost every day because it makes me feel more confident and complements my outfit. Wearing a pleasant fragrance not only refreshes me but also leaves a positive impression on others, which is important in both social and professional settings.

提案: 回答内容混乱且表达不清，存在语法和词汇错误。建议理清思路，直接回答问题，并用清晰的句子表达买香水作为礼物的看法。

例: I rarely buy perfume as a gift, but when I do, I think the recipient appreciates both the beautiful bottle and the fragrance itself. Perfume can be a thoughtful and personal present.

提案: 回答中表达不清且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并避免使用不准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I think perfumes can be quite expensive, especially for people who use them daily. As more people use perfume regularly, the high cost might affect sales.

× I like perfume and the actually Emma collector.

✓ I like perfume and actually collect them.

这里“the actually Emma collector”结构不正确，应该表达“我喜欢香水并且实际上收集它们”，需要将名词复数化并用动词collect替代collector。

× I enjoy trying different sense because everyone has unique smell and it makes me feel relaxed and calm.

✓ I enjoy trying different scents because everyone has a unique smell and it makes me feel relaxed and calm.

“sense”应为复数形式“scents”，表示不同的香味；“unique smell”前应加不定冠词“a”，表示“独特的气味”。

× Collecting perfume actually is a hobby for me and.

✓ Collecting perfume actually is a hobby for me.

句子末尾多余的“and”导致句子结构不完整，应去掉。

× I use perfume almost everyday because it makes me feel more confident and compliments my outfit.

✓ I use perfume almost every day because it makes me feel more confident and complements my outfit.

“everyday”是形容词，表示“日常的”，此处应使用副词短语“every day”表示“每天”；“compliments”应为“complements”，意为“衬托”。

× Wearing a pleasant fragrance not only refreshes myself but also leave a positive impression on others, which is both important for social and professional setting.

✓ Wearing a pleasant fragrance not only refreshes me but also leaves a positive impression on others, which is important for both social and professional settings.

“refreshes myself”中“myself”用法错误，应为宾格“me”；“leave”应与主语“Wearing a pleasant fragrance”保持单数形式“leaves”；“setting”应为复数“settings”；“both”应放在“social and professional”之前。

× I rarely buy perfume as a gift, and I will because it offers us alone, lost in pleasure.

✓ I rarely buy perfume as a gift, but I will because it offers us a moment alone, lost in pleasure.

连接词“and”应改为“but”表示转折；“offers us alone”缺少名词，应补充“a moment”；句意更通顺。

× First of people who are receiving perfume as a gift, Z will not only appreciate the delicacy of the container of perfume, but they also smells a preference.

✓ First of all, people who receive perfume as a gift will not only appreciate the delicacy of the perfume container, but they will also like the scent.

“First of people”应为“First of all”；“Z”应为“people”或省略；“smells a preference”表达不当，应改为“like the scent”；动词时态和主谓一致需调整。

× Now the number of people who will perform daily is considerably increasing, but the cost is higher, which in turn will affect the selling of perfume.

✓ Now the number of people who wear perfume daily is considerably increasing, but the cost is higher, which in turn will affect the sales of perfume.

“perform daily”用词错误，应为“wear perfume daily”；“selling of perfume”应为“sales of perfume”，更符合表达习惯。

× This I believe is the cost can be.

✓ This, I believe, is the cost it can be.

句子结构混乱，应调整为“This, I believe, is the cost it can be.”，使句子完整通顺。