Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as "Forget pregnancies" and "performs" instead of "perfumes." Try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

例: Yes, I like perfume, and the type I choose usually depends on my mood and the season. For instance, in summer, I prefer fresh and light scents, while in winter, I opt for warmer and sweeter fragrances. I especially enjoy perfumes with floral or fruity notes because they make me feel confident and happy.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing, such as "My favorite 1 is a floral sense" and "which it's my personality perfectly." Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar to improve clarity and fluency.

例: Yes, I use perfume every day. My favorite is a floral scent that feels fresh and light, which suits my personality perfectly. I like wearing it because it helps me feel confident and ready for the day ahead.

提案: Your answer has some unclear and incorrect phrases, such as "when it comes to sands" and "Said should everyone." Make sure to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures. Also, try to provide a clear reason and avoid unnecessary or confusing words.

例: No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's very personal. Everyone has different preferences when it comes to scents, so it's hard to know if the person will like it. Therefore, I prefer to choose more general gifts that suit everyone.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and lacks coherence. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Try to give a clear and complete answer with supporting details, using linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I think good perfumes are expensive because their quality is high. For example, my favorite perfume costs more than $100, which shows that quality perfumes usually have a higher price.

× Yes, I do like perfume but the type I just usually depends on my mood and this season.

✓ Yes, I do like perfume but the type I usually choose depends on my mood and the season.

The phrase 'the type I just usually depends' is incorrect because 'type' is singular and should be followed by a singular verb 'depends'. Also, 'just usually' is awkward; 'usually' alone is sufficient. 'This season' should be 'the season' to generalize the statement. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammatical agreement.

× For example, in summer I prefer fresh and cool sense that fill light and refreshing, while in winter I tend to wear sweeter and warmer.

✓ For example, in summer I prefer fresh and cool scents that feel light and refreshing, while in winter I tend to wear sweeter and warmer ones.

The word 'sense' should be 'scents' (plural noun) to refer to fragrances. 'Fill' is incorrect; it should be 'feel' to describe the sensation. Also, 'sweeter and warmer' needs a noun to modify; adding 'ones' clarifies the meaning. These corrections fix noun usage and verb choice errors.

× Forget pregnancies, I enjoy performs with floral or fruity notes because they make me feel more confident and happy.

✓ Forget perfumes, I enjoy perfumes with floral or fruity notes because they make me feel more confident and happy.

'Forget pregnancies' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo; it should be 'Forget perfumes' or omitted. 'Performs' is a wrong word; the correct noun is 'perfumes'. Correcting these words clarifies the intended meaning.

× Yes, I use perfume everyday.

✓ Yes, I use perfume every day.

'Everyday' is an adjective meaning common or normal, but here the adverbial phrase 'every day' (two words) is correct to indicate frequency. This is a common confusion between 'everyday' and 'every day'.

× My favorite 1 is a floral sense that feels fresh and light which it's my personality perfectly.

✓ My favorite one is a floral scent that feels fresh and light, which fits my personality perfectly.

'1' should be spelled out as 'one'. 'Sense' should be 'scent' to refer to fragrance. The phrase 'which it's my personality perfectly' is incorrect; it should be 'which fits my personality perfectly' to convey the intended meaning.

× I like wearing it because it helps me feel confident and ready for the day ahead.

✓ I like wearing it because it helps me feel confident and ready for the day ahead.

This sentence is correct; no preposition errors found.

× No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's very personal.

✓ No, I usually don't buy perfume as a gift because it's very personal.

This sentence is correct; no pronoun errors found.

× Everyone has different preferences when it comes to sands, so it's hard to know if the person will like it or not.

✓ Everyone has different preferences when it comes to scents, so it's hard to know if the person will like it or not.

'Sands' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'scents' referring to fragrances. This correction fixes the noun choice error.

× For this reason, I prefer to choose more natural gift.

✓ For this reason, I prefer to choose more natural gifts.

'Gift' should be plural 'gifts' to agree with 'more', which implies plural. This corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× Said should everyone.

✓ Everyone should say so.

The original sentence 'Said should everyone' is ungrammatical and unclear. Reordering the words to 'Everyone should say so' creates a correct and meaningful sentence.

× Because they are. Oh geez, they're. No. Call it depends on quality.

✓ Because they are. Oh geez, it depends on quality.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Call it depends on quality' is incorrect; it should be 'it depends on quality' to express the idea properly. Removing unnecessary fragments improves clarity.

× Then my favorite perfume costs more than $100.

✓ My favorite perfume costs more than $100.

The word 'Then' at the beginning is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow. Removing it makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.