Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达感受。

例: Yes, I like perfume because its scent gives me a sense of peace and comfort. I enjoy different kinds of perfumes that create a loving atmosphere and add a personal touch to the room.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和表达不清晰，建议使用正确的单词并简洁明了地说明使用场合。

例: Yes, I use perfume on special occasions like group meetings, and sometimes casually when I feel romantic or relaxed.

提案: 回答中表达不完整且有语法错误，建议完整表达观点并使用连贯的句子。

例: Yes, I sometimes buy perfume as a gift for my friends or myself because it adds a personal touch and strengthens our relationship.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，建议使用正确的语法并清晰表达预算和市场选择。

例: Yes, some perfumes are quite expensive, but I usually choose ones within my budget. There are many options available in the market, especially in the UK.

× Yes, I like a perfume because the smell of them brings me up sense of peace and are comforted and I like different kind of a perfume that brings up a love repression and stuff in the room and a personal touch.

✓ Yes, I like perfume because the smell of it brings me a sense of peace and comfort, and I like different kinds of perfume that bring up love, expression, and a personal touch in the room.

这里“a perfume”使用不当，perfume作为不可数名词时不需要冠词；“the smell of them”中“them”指代错误，应为单数“it”；“different kind of a perfume”应为复数“different kinds of perfume”；“brings”应改为“bring”以匹配复数主语。整体需要调整以符合单复数和代词使用规则。

× Yes, I use problems in special occasions such as a group meeting in person or sometimes I just use a perfuming casual when I have a love mood or have less special sense of feeling.

✓ Yes, I use perfume on special occasions such as group meetings in person, or sometimes I just use perfume casually when I am in a loving mood or have a less special feeling.

“problems”应为“perfume”，且“perfuming casual”表达错误，应为“use perfume casually”；“a group meeting”应为复数“group meetings”以匹配泛指；“love mood”应为“loving mood”；整体句子需要调整以符合单复数和正确词汇使用。

× Yes, I use problems in special occasions such as a group meeting in person or sometimes I just use a perfuming casual when I have a love mood or have less special sense of feeling.

✓ Yes, I use perfume on special occasions such as group meetings in person, or sometimes I just use perfume casually when I am in a loving mood or have a less special feeling.

“in special occasions”应改为“on special occasions”，因为固定搭配是“on occasions”；“in person”用法正确；“use perfume casually”中“casually”作为副词修饰动词。

× Yes, some kind of a perfume are quite expensive, but I usually choose the ones lie down under my budget and there are many choices in the. Target market and UK.

✓ Yes, some kinds of perfume are quite expensive, but I usually choose the ones within my budget, and there are many choices in the target market in the UK.

“some kind of a perfume are”应为“some kinds of perfume are”，主谓一致；“lie down under my budget”表达错误，应为“within my budget”；“the. Target market and UK”句子不完整，应为“the target market in the UK”。