Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且存在语法和词汇错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用具体例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I like perfume because it helps me feel confident and fresh. For example, I often wear floral scents that make me feel happy and energized.

提案: 回答重复且含糊，语法错误较多。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并说明使用香水的具体情况。

例: Yes, I use perfume every day, especially on special occasions or when I go out. It helps me feel more confident.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法和词汇错误严重。建议简洁明了地表达是否会买香水作为礼物，并说明原因。

例: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my family and friends because it is a thoughtful and popular present.

提案: 回答不连贯且含糊，词汇使用不当。建议直接表达观点，并用具体例子说明香水价格。

例: Yes, perfumes can be expensive, especially branded ones sold in shopping malls. However, there are also affordable options available.

× Yes, I like a perfume because I think the problem is a very important parts of Jimmy for example.

✓ Yes, I like perfume because I think perfume is a very important part of Jimmy, for example.

这里“a perfume”不需要冠词，perfume是不可数名词；“parts”应为单数“part”，因为指的是一个重要部分。

× I think perfume can give good emotional.

✓ I think perfume can give good emotions.

“emotional”是形容词，句中需要名词“emotions”来表达“情感”。

× And energies.

✓ And energy.

“energies”复数形式不合适，通常用不可数名词“energy”表示能量。

× So I like purfing.

✓ So I like perfume.

“purfing”拼写错误，应为“perfume”。

× Of course I worry like use perfume on IRI days.

✓ Of course I would like to use perfume on rainy days.

“worry like”错误，应为“would like to”；“IRI days”应为“rainy days”。

× I think perfume is a very important, important, important tours to me.

✓ I think perfume is a very important thing to me.

“tours”错误，应为“thing”或其他合适的单数名词。

× So I use perfume on every day.

✓ So I use perfume every day.

“on every day”应简化为“every day”，表示每天。

× Of course, I already paid the poor for perfume on gave my family and friends because I think it is a very interesting and good.

✓ Of course, I already paid for perfume and gave it to my family and friends because I think it is very interesting and good.

“paid the poor for perfume on gave”结构混乱，应拆分为“paid for perfume and gave it to”；“interesting and good”前不需要冠词。

× A good good uh, so I like the perfume.

✓ It's good, so I like the perfume.

重复“good good”不合适，简化为“It’s good”。

× Of course, the perfume is a worry are expensive, because up there are a lot of millennial perfume on send their people and the upper film in the shopping mall.

✓ Of course, perfume is quite expensive, because there are a lot of millennial perfumes sold to people and the perfume in the shopping mall is expensive.

“the perfume is a worry are expensive”语法错误，应为“perfume is quite expensive”；“millennial perfume”应为“millennial perfumes”；“on send their people”不通顺，改为“sold to people”；“upper film”应为“perfume”。

× This is very expensive.

✓ They are very expensive.

指代复数“perfumes”，应使用复数动词“are”。