Perfume— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了观点，但语言不够自然，存在重复和语法错误。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: No, I don't like perfume because it smells too strong and I am allergic to it. I prefer natural scents like lily flowers.

提案: 回答直接，但表达不够流畅，有语法错误。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意冠词和词汇搭配。

例: No, I don't use perfume daily because my skin is very sensitive and I am allergic to most perfumes.

提案: 回答中有较多语法和表达错误，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: Of course. Even though I don't like perfumes, I think giving someone an expensive and luxurious perfume shows sincerity. I enjoy giving such personalized gifts.

提案: 回答内容较好，但表达不够准确。建议改进词汇使用，避免重复，并用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I think most perfumes are quite expensive, probably because of the quality of their ingredients and effective marketing.

× I think it's sent to power powerful and also and I'm allergic allergic to it.

✓ I think it's too strong and also I'm allergic to it.

句中“sent to power powerful”是错误的形容词和副词使用，应改为“too strong”表示“太强烈”。另外，“allergic allergic”重复，应去掉一个。

× I prefer some nature signs like Lily flowers.

✓ I prefer some natural scents like lily flowers.

“nature signs”用词不当，应为“natural scents”表示“自然的香味”。“Lily”首字母小写。

× I'm allergic to most of perfumes so I don't take perfumes.

✓ I'm allergic to most perfumes so I don't use perfumes.

“most of perfumes”中“of”不需要，应为“most perfumes”。“take perfumes”用词不当，通常用“use perfumes”。

× although I don't like perfumes and but I think send some some someone a bottle of expensive and the luxuries perfumes can assure you sincere it is.

✓ Although I don't like perfumes, I think sending someone a bottle of expensive and luxurious perfume can show sincerity.

“and but”是错误的连词搭配，应只用“although”。“send some some someone”重复且用词错误，应改为“sending someone”。“luxuries perfumes”应为“luxurious perfume”。句子结构需调整使其通顺。

× I quite love to send people such personalized gift.

✓ I quite love to send people such personalized gifts.

“gift”应为复数形式“gifts”，因为“such”通常修饰复数名词。

× Yes, I find most of perfumes are really expensive, maybe because their materials or their excellent market marketing.

✓ Yes, I find most perfumes are really expensive, maybe because of their materials or excellent marketing.

“most of perfumes”中“of”不需要，应为“most perfumes”。“because their materials”缺少介词，应为“because of their materials”。“market marketing”重复，应简化为“marketing”。